Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment is essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that capital punishment is necessary to decrease the rate of violent crimes and to help our lives to be safer. In my opinion, I partly agree with this view.

On the one hand, the death penalty is disadvantageous to some extent. Firstly, there may be too many people executed, so that there will be too few workers in society. In fact, some criminals who are punished are good laborers, the development of a country may also be affected. Secondly, capital punishment shows that crime is not tolerated. After offending, many criminals undertand their mistakes and want to start over. Obviously, these people need to be given a chance to begin again and we should not take their lives. It is not always the case that the death penalty is a good deterrence.

On the other hand, there are a variety of advantageous to capital punishment. The most convincing argument is that fear of the death penalty stops people from committing offences. If a person imagines that there are few people standing around and pointing guns at their head, they will not dare to offend. Another reason is that offenders would be convicted and killed. They can not pose a threat to others, which allows people feel more secure. It is common sense that our behavior would be better and crime rates would be reduced.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, while I accept capital punishment has its own drawbacks, I believe that there are many notable benefits.

 

Answer 1

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Answer 2

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It is sometimes argued that capital punishment is necessary to decrease the rate of violent crimes and to help our lives become safer. In my opinion, I partly agree with this view.

On the one hand, the death penalty is disadvantageous to some extent. Firstly, there may be too many people executed, so that capital punishment may cause the shortage of workers in society. In fact, some criminals who are punished are good laborers,therefore the development of a country may also be affected. Secondly, capital punishment shows that crime is not tolerated. After offending, many criminals undertand their mistakes and want to start over. Obviously, these people need to be given a second chance to begin again and we should not take their lives. It is not always the case that the death penalty is a good deterrence.

On the other hand, there are a variety of advantages to capital punishment. The most convincing argument is that fear of the death penalty stops people from committing offences. If a person imagines that there are few people standing around and pointing guns at their head, they will not dare to offend. Another reason is that offenders would be convicted and killed ( Lí do khác là tội phạm sẽ bị xét xử và giết?! bạn phải nó rõ idea rồi mới chám câu nhé, topic sentence mà) . They can not pose a threat to others, which allows people feel more secure. It is common sense that our behavior would be better and crime rates can be reduced.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, though I accept capital punishment has some drawbacks, I believe that the positive effects it brings to society can outweigh the negative ones. 

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