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Question

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

 

Choosing subjects to study at university is a debatable issue. Although some people think that students should only study key subjects instead of study subjects they like, I have an opposite opinion with them.

Nowadays, every country is developing towards modernization so science and technology are becoming really important. That is one of the reasons make people think that subjects such as medicine, hi-tech, and engineering will be useful in the future. From a personal perspective, these courses provide more job opportunities, career, high salaries and become successful. Furthermore, university's focus on science and technology will be an important contribution to national economy.

 In spite of these arguments, I think that it would be better if students choose subjects depends on their hobby. In fact, people can't predict which subjects will be useful in the future because the trend might change one day. Especially, when students study the subjects they like, they will have great passion and motivation to continue studying and do their best. Besides, if University only allows students to study science and technology, there will be too many workers for that subjects and the unemployment will increase.

To be concluded, I think it doesn't matter which subject will be useful in the future, the students should just study what they like and passion. Thanks to that, they can still be successful and useful in society.

Answer 1

Thanks a lot for your eassy. I want to share with you some points below which I think they are incorrect.

Firstly, the phrase "From a personal perspective". It sounds OK but It will be more attractive if you use "From my perspective". 

Career ---> Careers.

University's focus on....----> The concentration on science and technology....

choose subjects depends on their hobby-----> Choose subjects which accord with their hobbies.

the trend might change----> might/could be changed.

there will be too......--->The number of workers relevant to these subjects (science and technology) will be excessive and the unemployment will be increased.

Thank to that....---> could use Based on that.

 

Those information above are my opnions. Hope you have a good day. And nice to be your friend on oneday.