Some people think that university education should be totally free for all students. Do you agree or disagree?

Question

Tertiary education is very important because students are equipped with knowledge and skills to work, but many people have not qualified financially to go to universities. Therefore, there is saying that students should be studied freely in universities. I, on the other hand, firmly believe that there are some problems happening if universities abolish tuition for students.

Firstly, universities always need expenses to work. Universities have a good education are accompanied with a great operating expenses. For example, the salary pay for a professor is higher than paying for a normal lecturer. A well-equipped classroom definitely cost many expenses. In some developed countries, the tuition fee is supported by the government. However, in developing countries, the discount tuition is good enough not to mention the free one.

Secondary, if students do not fork over for studying, they will not appreciate the studying because whatever the result is, they lose nothing. This will reduce the quality of students. In contrast, universities have its own scholarship to encourage students that achieve the excellent academic records.  Consequently, if you do not have money, try to study well, you will not have to pay.

In conclusion, it is my belief that there should not be totally free for all students, because of two main reasons: universities need expenses to provide a good education, while at the same time it encourages students study more positive. Students can find ways to enter a university through scholarship programs or online course from universities with the lower cost. Hence, if you really want to study in a university, money is not an issue.

Answer 1

Hi haihack,

Below are my comments:

Your good points:

1/ It is good that you chose to talk about 1 side, e.g disagree. Just picking 1 side is better than an answer with "half agree and half disagree with the question".

2/ Your conclusion did summarize your opinion and the 2 main points of your supporting paragraphs -> This is good.

Things should be improved:

1/ "You" and colon (:) should not be used in IELTS writing.

2/ Your introduction should outline the 2 main points of your supporting paragraphs.

3/ Some grammar mistakes:

• it encourages students study more positive ->  it encourages students to study more positive (encourage somebody to do something)
• Universities have a good education are accompanied with a great operating expenses. -> Universities which have a good education are usually accompanied by great operating costs. 
• For example, the salary pay for a professor is higher than paying for a normal lecturer. -> This is to say that professor's salary tend to be higher than that of a normal lecturer.
• A well-equipped classroom definitely cost many expenses. -> A well-equipped classroom definitely costs a great amount of money.

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