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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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University students enroll in a predetermined set of subjects throughout their college life. Both male and female students are often allowed to join these subjects together. However, it is disagreed that universities be forced to balance the number of male and female students in every subject. The uneven ratios of male and female enrolment as well as the complex task of arranging student enrolment will show this.

Firstly, some courses have a higher male to female ratio, while others have the exact opposite. For example, the College of Engineering has a higher number of male students enrolled compared to females. The odds of achieving the same ratio of students in each subject for an engineering course are close to nil. Thus, it can be seen that it is impossible for universities to satisfy this requirement when there is simply an imbalance in the male to female enrolment ratio.

Secondly, arranging student enrolment ratio based on sex rather than on a first-come first-serve basis will produce chaos and shall be a daunting task for school administrators. For example, Philippine Universities implement a first-come first-serve basis during the limited enrolment time in order for them to be able to complete the issuance of school matriculation to students. Prioritizing the sex of a student during enrolment will allow some students to be left without a school matriculation even if they reported earlier than others. Thus, it is clear that achieving equal male to female ratio in every subject will not be possible anytime soon.

To summarize, the natural imbalance of male to female enrolment ratio and the chaos and complexity in arranging student enrolments based on sex show that it is impossible to achieve equal number of males and females in all subjects. It is therefore disagreed that universities be forced to comply with this requirement. It is predicted that this trend of having an imbalanced gender enrolment ratio will continue to be evident in the years to come.

 

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University students enroll in a predetermined set of subjects throughout their college life. Both male and female students are often allowed to join these subjects together. However, it is disagreed that universities should be forced to balance the number of male and female students in every subject. The uneven ratios of male and female enrolment as well as the complex task of arranging student enrolment will show this ( bạn nên nêu rõ quan điểm cá nhân của bạn là agree hay disagree với topic như đề bài đã yêu cầu bằng cánh dùng những từ như I personally believe, I think that...)

Firstly, some courses have a higher male to female ratio, while others have the exact opposite. For example, the College of Engineering has a higher number of male students enrolled compared to females. The odds of achieving the same ratio of students in each subject for an engineering course are close to nil. Thus, it can be seen that it is impossible for universities to satisfy this requirement when there is simply an imbalance in the number of male and female students t in each module the male to female enrolment ratio ( bạn dùng từ male to femal enrolment ratio hơi nhiều, hãy tránh dùng lặp từ).(trong bài này bạn dùng từ ratio hơi nhiều dẫn đến việc lặp đi lặp lại từ, bạn có thể dùng các từ khác như the percentage, proportion, the rate...etc.)

Secondly, arranging student enrolment ratio based on sex rather than on a first-come first-serve basis will be likely to produce chaos and shall be a daunting task for school administrators. For example, Philippine Universities implement a first-come first-serve basis during the limited enrolment time in order for them to be able to complete the issuance of school matriculation to students. Prioritizing the sex of a student during enrolment will allow some students to be left without a school matriculation even if they reported registered earlier than others. Thus, it is clear that achieving equal male to female ratio  in every subject will not be possible impracticable anytime soon. ( hãy cố gắng đừng dùng quá nhiều từ possible hay impossible, hãy tìm những từ đồng nghĩa tương tự )

To summarize, the natural imbalance of male to female enrolment ratio rate and the chaos and  ass well as complexity in arranging student enrolments based on sex show that it is impossible unfeasible to achieve equal number of males and females in all subjects. It is therefore disagreed In my view,  that universities shouldn't be be forced to comply with this such  requirement. It is predicted that this the trend of having an imbalanced gender enrolment ratio will continue to be evident in the years to come. ( đến conclusion, hay lặp lại ý kiến của bạn lần nữa hãy dùng những từ như in my opinion, in my view....)

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