Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries? [closed]

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Some people are concerned that travelling to other countries can surge up the local resentment against visitors. While that, other people think having a trip to foreign countries is an occasion for developing knowledge. In my opinion, globalization, which includes travelling from one country to another, is an all-embracing term that people should appreciate.  
International travels would never bring conflicts between travelers and locals because it derived from economical motivation. It opens up opportunities for business development throughout the world. The locals must show their hospitality to visitors in exchange for their trust. In turn, the visitors probably should learn about cultures and traditional of the country which they will travel to for advoiding embarrassing situations. Thus, they will have a same view and strictly know that the acceptance of others ‘s cultural background is necessary for cooperation.
Distinctly, there are many indelible issues based on the divergence of culture, religion and social background. However, many problems have been solved because of high interaction, the higher level of communication and understanding. Arabians, for example, used to consider westerners as their foes. Now they have concrete relations with their western allies in many fields. In the initial stage, their discrepancy seemed inherent but over time, with better mutual understanding, they take the same position on many issues.
In short, the advantages of international travels still overweigh the disadvantages. It strictly is a valuable chance for improving interconnected process and it also opens a new century for human being – the century of cooperation.

Answer 1

having a trip(s) to foreign countries

economical motivation: economical incentives

However, many problems have been solved because of (thanks to) high (cross-border) interaction, the higher level of communication and understanding (please re-read this sentence again, do you find it sounds weird?)

westerners: Westerners. Be careful, as you say Westerners here, there could be plenty of nations you are implying to. And not any nations in the continent of Europe/ North America/ Africa are Westerns.

In the initial stage, their discrepancy seemed inherent but over time, with better mutual understanding, they take the same position on many issues.

--> In the initial stage, their discrepancy seemed inherent, however, they have developed better mutual understanding and led to consensus on many issues over time.

In general,

I think you should work more on writing adacemic essays. Since your writing contains some parts that are messed up, maybe try to paraphrase the sentences will make the essay look better.