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Topic 1: :Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the goverment of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Nowadays, when economy of the world tends to develop rapidly, the difference between the richest country and the poorest country gets more and more largely. This is reason that having many the weath nations are sharing some scoures for poorer nations in order to meet basic demands such as food and education. In my view, I think this is not the best way in long term.

First of all, the poor nations will be depended on aids that make them get passively and lose motivations in order to improve country by themselves. When their basic demands such as eating food, communication tend to meet by helping of other countries, citizens of this nations will think that they do not need work or try to earn money but they are able to exit normally. This is greatly dangerous if it is spread to the teenager or students of the poor nations. It is main reason that make their country not develop in the near future, as the results, they will still be at low level in the world.

Secondly, looking after resident is the most responsibility of goverment in this nation. In order to develop economy of a country, the goverment has to promulgate exactly policies that are suitable with conditions and expectation of citizens. They tend to lead whole nation and compact recourses so their nation can get goals and enhance standards life of residents. For example, in Vietnam – developing country, when the policy that the goverment lends students with low rate about 5 percent yearly was given, having more students are able to study in universities or colleges. It make chances creat high quality of workforce in order to change image of Vietnam in the world and attract investment.

In conclusion, I think the poor or developing country should combine between helping of developed country and their recourses if they want to get susrainable development.

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Topic 1: :Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the goverment of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves?

Nowadays, when economy of the world tends to develop rapidly, the difference between the richest country and the poorest country gets more and more largely. This is reason that having many the weath nations are sharing some scoures (sources) for poorer nations in order to meet basic demands such as food and education. In my view, I think this is not the best way in long term. 

Nowadays, along with global economy is significantly developing.....This is a dominant reason to wealthy countries have conducted programs to support least nations aim to meet.... (you should not use article "the" in front of its noun because when you mention about any nations that mean you just notify generally, no specific nation). Personally, I strongly contend that is far from being the best measurement.

First of all, the poor nations will (easily) be depended on aids (assistances of well-being member states) that make (makes) them get passively and lose motivations in order to improve country by themselves ( poverished nations will certainly be depended on assisting resources of well-being member states that defuses active character and exacerbate its motivation..). When their basic demands such as eating food, communication tend to meet by helping of other countries, citizens of this nations (wrong grammar) will think that they do not need work or try to earn money but they are able to exit normally. This is greatly dangerous if it is spread to the teenager or students of the poor nations. It is main reason that make their country not develop in the near future, as the results, they will still be at low level in the world.

Secondly, looking after resident (residents) is the most responsibility of goverment in this nation (what nation). In order to develop economy of a country, the goverment has to promulgate exactly policies that are suitable with conditions and expectation of citizens. They tend to (this the the third time You used this structure) lead whole nation and compact recourses so their nation can get goals and enhance standards life of residents (standarded conditions for life). For example, in Vietnam – developing country, when the policy that the goverment lends students with low rate about 5 percent yearly was given, having more students are able to study in universities or colleges. It make chances creat high quality of workforce in order to change image of Vietnam in the world and attract investment.

In conclusion, I think the poor or developing country should combine between helping of developed country and their recourses if they want to get susrainable (sustainable) development.

 

Your skills in this kind of test are slightly poor and used confused structures. Practice makes perfect.

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Theo minh thi minh se sua lai nhu sau: 

- the difference between the richest country and the poorest country gets more and more largely => the gap beteween ....... is becoming wider 

This is reason => this is the reason or a reason

-that having many the weath nations => that many weath nations 

-sharing some scoures for poorer nations in order to meet basic demands such as food and education => provide essential demand for the daily life such as food and education.
To be continue, but I've just done in here :))) So hope you study well :3

- they will still be at low level in the world.=> they will be at a standstill.

-the poor nations will be depended on aids => will depend on ( not will be depended on )

-that make them get passively and lose motivations in order to improve country by themselves.=> which makes them.... their country 

 communication tend to meet by => tend to cope with or deal with or solve .... 
but they are able to exit normally => to be honest, I don't understand clearly what your mean in this sentence :v 

This is greatly dangerous if it is spread to the teenager or students of the poor nations => it spread ( spread is the verb so you don't need to-be verb before )

 

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