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“The Internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. on the other hand, it also isolates us and encourage people not to socialize
To what extend do you agree or disagree with these statements?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiences.”

It is hard to imagine what life would be without the Internet. Every day, you still have to use the internet at work and in school, you need to communicate with people, but can not be hand written letter ... because very time-consuming. You will need internet, social networking sites to communicate and connect with people not only to solve their work but also for entertainment in times of stress. But along with the benefits that still exist the bad side caused by the Internet, do not little to influence life today, especially the young. So the Internet is essentially "two-edged knife" like?

 I want to mention some of the advantages that the Internet provides Internet has become the means to communicate and exchange information, coöperate and exchange ... between people and organizations and countries across the planet is fast and extremely convenient, contribute to the growth and development of freedom of speech and freedom worldwide.With presence and communication technology, personal information by implementing freedom of speech delivered to society seem to multiplied ten years and with the speed at which news from the other side of the earth can get to this side of the earth is only a few minutes. If the former, take from 4 days to 1 week to send a letter in the mail from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City, is now just a few seconds by using e-mail, also known as Email . This is a great app from Internet. Instead of writing a letter with pen and paper, to buy stamps, envelopes, and then to the post office to send off, now you just need to type a letter on the computer and send them away with your email while computer with an Internet connection, not only save costs but also make sure safety for the recipient. Meanwhile, in a letter of letter mail could be considered theft or address change recipients can not reach recipients.

But along with the benefits mentioned above, the Internet remains the face caused by the user caused. In many countries, the psychologist noted the state of emergency to deal malady of a new fad, there are Internet addicts. Internet addiction is a psychological disease risk. Manifestations usually forget time, neglect eating and sleeping; anger, stress, anxiety when not online; symptoms of depression, or anger and social isolation. Online Gaming is a form of Internet addiction. Also, the Internet is also an opportunity leading to marriage breakdown, separated families. You just try to think, if now you all day sitting at your laptop, or use a smart phone for hours and nobody around you and then life will be like?

 

To sum up, i would like to say that internet is just a part of our life, like many other things and there will always be a lot of different judgements and opinions upon it. Furthermore only we can do it better or worse for ourselves and our society in whole. So let's be smart Internet users, we realize that one thing that if we used the right way, selectively, the benefits that the Internet brings a lot.

 

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It is hard to ( spoken language) imagine what life would be without the Internet. Every day, you still have to use the internet at work and in school, you need to communicate with people, but can not ( cannot ) be hand written letter ...  because very time-consuming. You will need internet ( the Internet ), social networking sites to communicate and connect with people not only to solve their work but also for entertainment ( non-parallel structurein times of stress. But along with the benefits that still exist the bad side caused by the Internet, do not little to influence life today, especially the young. So the Internet is essentially "two-edged knife" like? ( Do not offer any question in IELTS essay )

 I want to mention some of the advantages that the Internet provides Internet has become the means to communicate and exchange information, coöperate and exchange ... between people and organizations and countries across the planet is fast and extremely convenient , contribute ( contributing ) to the growth and development of freedom of speech and freedom worldwide.With presence and communication technology, personal information by implementing freedom of speech delivered to society seem to multiplied ten years and with the speed at which news from the other side of the earth can get to this side of the earth is only a few minutes. If the former, take from 4 days to 1 week to send a letter in the mail from Hanoi to Ho Chi Minh City,(?? where is the latter ?) is now just a few seconds by using e-mail, also known as Email ( ?????). This is a great app from Internet. Instead of writing a letter with pen and paper, to buy stamps, envelopes, and then to (??? either and or then )  the post office to send off, now you just need to type a letter on the computer and send them away with your email while computer with an Internet connection, not only save costs but also make sure safety for the recipient. Meanwhile, in a letter of letter mail could be considered theft or address change recipients can not reach recipients.

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