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Question

The line graph compares the amount of fast food which Australian young people used between 1975 and 2000.

It is clear that the number of fast food which is eaten by Australian teenagers changes significantly over the period shown. Overall, the consumption of fish and chips decreases sharply in comparison with the amount of pizza and hamburgers increase suddenly.

In 1975, the proportion of youth eating fish and chips in Australia is was about 100. The figure for pizza and hamburgers were lower, at about nearly 20 respectively. In 1995, the consumption of pizza and hamburgers rose to around 90, while the figure for fish and chips went down to 40.

By 2000, the amount of hamburgers was highest in Australia. Almost 100 of hamburgers was eaten, compared to about 80 of pizza and only 40 of fish and chips.

 

Answer 1

The line graph compares the amount of fast food which Australian young people use expensed between 1975 and 2000.

It is clear that the number of fast food which is eaten by Australian teenagers changed significantly over the period shown. Overall, the consumption of fish and chips decreased sharply in comparison with the amount of pizza and hamburgers increased suddenly.

In 1975, the proportion of youth eating fish and chips in Australia is was about 100. However,the figure for pizza and hamburgers were lower, at about nearly 20 respectively. In 1995, the consumption of pizza and hamburgers rose to around 90, while the figure for fish and chips went down to 40.

By 2000, the amount of hamburgers was highest in Australia hamburgers is the most common form of fast foods with almost 100 of hamburgers was eaten, compared to about 80 of pizza and only 40 of fish and chips.

Answer 2

The line graph compares the amount of fast food which Australian young people used comsumped between 1975 and 2000.

It is clear that the number of fast food which is eaten by Australian teenagers expended changes fluctuated significantly over the period shown. Overall, the consumption of fish and chips decreases had a downward trend sharply in comparison with while the amount expenditure of pizza and hamburgers increased significantly suddenly.

In 1975, the proportion of youth eating fish and chips in Australia was selected by  young people approximately 100 times per year is was about 100. The figure for pizza and hamburgers were lower, at about nearly 20 respectively. In 1995, the consumption of pizza and hamburgers rose to around 90, while the figure for fish and chips went down to 40. During a half decade between 1975 and 1980, it decreased sightnificantly by nearly 20, then fluctuated and reached a pick at about 95 in 1985. Thus, the total time for it was under 40 in 2000.

By 2000, the amount of hamburgers was highest in Australia. Almost 100 of hamburgers was eaten, compared to about 80 of pizza and only 40 of fish and chips.

In contrast, pizza and humburgers witnessed a dramtic increase from under 10 to over 80 and nearly 100, respectively. The figure for humburgers speeded faster than pizza and after 1995, both of that remained at the same figure until 2000.

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