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Q: Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.
In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?
has it become a positive or negative development?
A:
There is a clear fact that the high-tech development in modern world has altered the ways people use to communicate to each other. This situation is reasonable to understand and in my essay I will give a comprehensive discussion on my personal views.
In the past, with the traditional communication, it just simply transferred information person-by-person or through deliver service such as by post-office with letters. But with a remarkable growing of technology, people now get easier to make new friends, know up-to-date information from our family just only by a phone call or surfing social network, the world now and apparently everything turns more convenient in present time. For an example, the creation of smart devices such as smartphone, computer make parents can contact to their children just by a call instead go to post-office to send a letter.
With the significant jump of high technology, society is considering about the advantages and disadvantages in this development. For the positive aspect, it is undeniable that technology is seemingly pulling everyone over the world closer with the fast speed and conveniences in transferring information. In the other side, there is a raising argument that people in modern world are get into virtual life that makes people become careless gradually, especially for youngsters. To demonstrate, if people can control themselves not to depend too much on technology, these developments can make our world be more perfect.
To sum up, human-being are now enjoying the achievements of technology and even this changes some parts of our live. But with the positive side has brought out to our world, it definitely overwhelms the drawbacks of technology development.