money and marriage [closed]

Question

Money is always important in everything and marriage is also a case. And for me, financial considerations also have a more or less affection my decision to marry.

People want to eat, wear, or want to have a good health and good knowledge,…, they need to have money. Although money is not everything, you will not have everything if no money. Also in marriage, couples’ perceptions about money are more important than whether they have much money, if they reckon that money is enough and they continue to strive for their happy family life. In a couples life, they work to earn enough to live on, to spend petty things, to bring up their children both materials and education. These are some of the reasons about affections of financial considerations to my decisions in marriage.

In the modern life, I reluctantly have to consider my spouse’s finance before I decide to get married. His finance has to make a sure that it will satisfy my desires about a happy family life.

Consequently, money impacts on both marriage and decision to marry, but it is only more or less. It absolutely depends on couples’ perceptions about money.

Answer 1

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