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Question

 

The charts illustrate average monthly figures for temperatures and rainfalls of a calendar year in Equatorial and Mediterranean.

 

It is noticeable that the Mediterranean climate varies considerably over the period shown, while Equatorial figures remain relatively stable.

 

In Equatorial area, there is always rainfall every month in a year with the amount of rainfall at over 150mm. November and December have the highest figure than others months at about 250mm. By contrast, the amount of rainfall at Mediterranean type of climate is separated by two distinct seasons. Dry season prolongs from November to March with highest figure in January at roughly 175mm, whereas from April to October is wet season.

 

Regarding to temperature, there are some differences between Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate. The temperature of Equatorial site stays at around 25^oC each month, while temperature of Mediterranean is unstable. The driest month is August, the temperature reaches the highest number at about 28^oC. Besides, the lowest temperature goes on wetter months from November to March.

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The charts illustrate average monthly figures for temperatures and rainfalls of a calendar year in Equatorial and Mediterranean.

It is noticeable that the Mediterranean climate varies considerably over the period shown, while Equatorial figures remain relatively stable. Có thể nói thêm là nhiệt độ và lượng mưa ở Equatorial nhìn chung cao hơn ở Mediterranean.

In Equatorial area, there is always rainfall every month in a year with the amount of rainfall  every month is relatively high, at over 150mm. November and December have the highest higher figures than others months, at about 250mm. By contrast, the amount of rainfall at in Mediterranean type of climate is separated by two distinct seasons. Dry season prolongs from November to March with highest figure in January at roughly 175mm, whereas the period from April to October is wet season.

 

Regarding to temperature, there are some differences between Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate. The temperature of Equatorial site stays at around 25^oC each month, while temperature of Mediterranean is unstable. The driest month is August when the temperature reaches the highest number at about 28^oC. Besides, the lowest temperature goes on wetter months from November to March.

Comments

The two graphs compare Equatorial and Mediterranean area in terms of monthly temperature and rainfall in a year.
It is obvious that both the temperature and rainfall in Equatorial are significant higher than that in Mediterranean. Mediterranean climate, however, is more fluctuated during the year.
The amount of rain in Equatorial is roughly similar in every month, at between 200-250mm per month. On the other hand, rainfall amount in Mediterranean is relatively lower and varies among months. Mediterranean experiences dry season from April to October with the figures frequently more less 20mm. By contrast, the rainfall is much higher in the remained period reaching approximately 170mm in January.
The temperature in Equatorial area is around 23-27*C. The highest figures are seen on May and December, while it is lowest in January. In comparison, the figures for Mediterranean are considerably different between dry and wet season. The Mediterranean temperature is high from April to October and low in other months, peaking at about 27*C in August and plummeting at nearly 12*C in January.

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