Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important for children's education development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?

Question

An often debated topic is whether high school should add the art classes to teach pupils several subjects such as painting and drawing. In my opinion, I believe that these subjects might be taught as the optional lessons in the curriculum because a number of reasons, as will now be discussed in this essay.

   To begin with, although it is undeniable that art classes with some subjects like drawing are relatively important to improve the perception about the life around children. For example, pupils will have more knowledge about the environment or animals throughout painting or drawing trees or some lovely animals like cats and dogs. As the result, their understanding about the various aspects of nature will enhance and this is beneficial for them.

   On the other hand, other subjects namely maths of literature are crucial to children's education when they participate in classes at school. In addition, these subjects are definitely fundamental for childs in the future, particularly when they start to the university life. For instance, in many places in developing countries such as Vietnam, subjects like maths is the most important role in the timetable of pupils and they also spend a great deal of time for studing that subject. Moreover, art classes seem to encourage only small part of total pupils in a class who are completely enjoy painting. Therefore, teachers in high school should take these subjects as some extra lesson's hours with the purpose of entertainment of reducing stress after studing overload other important subjects.

   In conclusion, for aboved remedies, I inclined to believe that art classes should not be ignored at schools but also not be compulsory because other subjects are more impotant than that.

 

Answer 1

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For example, pupils will have -> likely have more knowledge about the environment or animals...

children/pupils/the young/ offsprings

childs-> children

studing-> studying

For instance, in many places in developing countries such as Vietnam, subjects like maths is the most important role -> For instance, in some developing countries like Vietnam math, plays an important role...

Moreover, art classes seem to encourage only small part of total pupils in a class who are completely enjoy painting.  -> Moreover, art classes tend to brings advantages for children who are good at painting.

In conclusion, for aboved remedies, I inclined to believe that art classes should not be ignored at schools but also not be compulsory because other subjects are more impotant than that. -> In conclusion, I partly/fairly agree with this idea.....

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