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Many companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think this is good for the world of sports, while others think there are disadvantages of this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

 

 

 

Many businesses are now sponsoring sports teams and events as a means of advertising. There is an argument about whether it has positive or negative effects. However, I believe it is up to sports organisations to ensure companies, that donate to them, provide good products for our health and society.

 

On the one hand, many sports teams and players could not practice without sponsorship. Every team require a variety of facilities for players' workout, which spend a lot of money to purchase, and sponsors give them for free. For instance, it cost a great deal of money to owing large area and building a stadium for football teams to practice and compete. If there are no sponsors, there would be fewer high qualities footballers, and football culture may be destroyed. Moreover, players could focus on dedication to sports and have a successful career without being distracted by financial worries.

 

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages which occur when large sporting events receive sponsoring from companies that produce goods which have negative effects on people and society, like tobacco companies. As an example, if big sports organisations such as World Cup and Olympics utilise Tobacco companies' advertisements, there might be more the young develop a positive association with tobacco through watching these events.

 

In conclusion, sports sponsoring can have both advantages and disadvantages, however, it is up to the sports organisations to make sure that they do not use sponsored companies, which have a bad influence on people and society.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

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Many businesses are now sponsoring sports teams and events as a means of advertising. There is an argument about whether it has positive or negative effects. However, I believe it is up to sports organisations to ensure companies, that donate to them, provide good products for our health and society.

 

On the one hand, many sports teams and players could not practice without sponsorship. Every team require a variety of facilities for players' workout, which spend a lot of money to purchase  -> can cost a fortune to own, and sponsors give them for free. For instance, it costs a great deal of money to owing -> own a large area and building a stadium for football teams to practice and compete. If there are no sponsors, there would be fewer high qualities -> talented footballers, and football culture may be destroyed. Moreover ->As a result, players could focus on dedication to sports and have a successful career without being distracted by financial worries.

 

On the other hand, there are some disadvantages which occur when large sporting events receive sponsoring -> sponsorship from companies that produce goods which have negative effects on people and society, like tobacco companies. As an example, if big sports organisations such as World Cup and Olympics utilise Tobacco companies' advertisements, there might be more the young develop -> more young people develop a positive association with tobacco through watching these events.

 

In conclusion, sports sponsoring can have both advantages and disadvantages, however, it is up to the sports organisations to make sure that they do not use sponsored companies, which have a bad influence on people and society.

 

 

 

 

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Many businesses are now sponsoring sports teams and events as advertising. There is an argument about whether it has positive or adverse effects. However, I believe it is up to sports organisations to ensure that companies that donate to them provide good products for our health and society.

 

On the one hand, many sports teams and players could not practice without sponsorship. Every team requires various facilities for players' workout, which spend money to purchase  -> can cost a fortune to own, and sponsors give them for free. For instance, it costs a great deal of money to owing -> own a large area and builds a stadium for football teams to practice and compete. Without sponsors, there would be fewer high qualities -> talented footballers, and football culture may be destroyed. Moreover ->As a result, players could focus on dedication to sports and have a successful career without being distracted by financial worries.

 

On the other hand, some disadvantages occur when significant sporting events receive sponsoring -> sponsorship from companies that produce goods that negatively affect people and society, like tobacco companies. As an example, if big sports organisations such as World Cup and Olympics utilise Tobacco companies' advertisements, there might be more the young develop -> more young people develop a positive association with tobacco through watching these events.

 

In conclusion, sports sponsoring can have both advantages and disadvantages. However, it is up to the sports organisations to make sure that they do not use sponsored companies, which negatively influence people and society.

Answer 2

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