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It cannot  be denied that technology has developed very strongly recently ,  this made personal devices become more popular and more essential . In my opinion ,  it plays a crucial role in our lives , i completely  trust that this is a positive development .

Firstly , we should understand what is technology . This is a wide conception , it consist of modern devices , progess sciences , things that are addressed by artificial wisdom , ect .. Generally , technology is items which help our lives to become better , more simple and more interesting . And one of that items is potential to work without being on company , work places even if we can work from any where we want . With small laptop or smartphone , we may bring everywhere  such as coffee , hotel , .. because wifi is currently widespread , especially as public places . 4G is a indisopensable part in our lives , it is portable whenever  we go anywhere , it even have in there . Next to , some technologist are praticing 5G on many countries of  Euroupe , and China .

Secondly , nowadays , jobs are solved at all by technology namely personal devices . It is too convenient to use , deal with jobs and problems . Moreover , technology have a cheap price than  many years ago . I will demonstrate by some evidence , with an iphone and samsung smartphone price , more expensive than nows . In 2015 , one iphone cost approximately 2000 dollar  but in 2021  , it is just about 1000 dollar , with the most morden technology .

In conclusion , technology has changed so much our lives , and but it is available on these
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It cannot  be denied --> It cannot deny that technology has developed very strongly recently ,  this made personal devices become more popular and more essential . In my opinion ,  it plays a crucial role in our lives , i completely  trust that this is a positive development .

Firstly , we should understand what is technology . This is a wide conception , it consist of modern devices , progess sciences -->  scientific progress, things that are addressed by artificial wisdom , ect .. Generally , technology is items which help our lives to become better , more simple and more interesting . And one of that items is potential to work without being on company , work places even if we can work from any where we want . With small laptop or smartphone , we may bring everywhere  such as coffee , hotel , .. because wifi is currently widespread , especially as public places . 4G is a indisopensable --> indispensable part in our lives ,--> live.  it is portable whenever  we go anywhere , it even have in there . Next to , some technologist are praticing 5G on many countries of  Euroupe , and China .

Secondly , nowadays , jobs are solved at all by technology namely personal devices  -->  Many jobs can be done by machine instead of humans.  It is too -->  very convenient and easy to use -->  when using, deal with jobs and problems . Moreover , technology have a cheap price than  many years ago -->  technology makes the cost of products significantly reduced. I will demonstrate by some evidence  --> examples with an iphone and samsung smartphone price , more expensive than nows . In 2015 , one iphone cost approximately 2000 dollar  but in 2021  , it is just about 1000 dollar , with the most morden technology. -->  The prices of smartphones are rapidly decreasing, it is far lower than in the past with a lot of kinds and come from many makers.

In conclusion , technology has changed so much our lives , and but it is available on these

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