Bài writing sáng 15/4 - IDP Hà Nội - entertaining and educational

Question

Last summer, I and my family went to Ha Long bay and it’s very funny and interesting. It is about 50km from my hometown to there. We got there by car. Ha Long bay is famous for beautiful caves and islands so we could take many beautiful photos in here. We enjoyed many delicious foods and drinks, especially seafood. Its taste was so good that I could not forget. Many things was tried by us. Although we had a little  exhausted in this vacation, it was very interesting and hilarious for us to knew more about Ha Long bay. We took a boat rode around the islands. We sat in the boat and looked beautiful view surrounded us, it felt so comfortable and relaxing. We swam at sea, the water here was very clear and cool. We also built sandcastles or played volleyball on the beach. We joined others exciting activities: sawing 5D film, watched water music or dolphins showed,... It was such an amazing trip that i never forgot.

Answer 1

Last summer, I and my family went to Ha Long bay and it’s very funny and interesting. It is about 50km from my hometown to there. We got there by car. Ha Long bay is famous for beautiful caves and islands so we could take many beautiful photos in here. We enjoyed many delicious foods and drinks, especially seafood. Its taste was so good that I could not forget. Many things was --> were tried by us. Although we had a little exhausted in this vacation, it was very interesting and hilarious for us to knew more about Ha Long bay. We took a boat rode around the islands. We sat in the boat and looked beautiful view surrounded us, it felt so comfortable and relaxing. We swam at sea, --> the sea, the water here -->  the seawater was very clear and cool. We also built sandcastles or played volleyball on the beach. We joined others exciting activities: sawing --> like watching 5D film, watched  -->  listening to water music or dolphins showed -->  or playing with dolphin. It was such an amazing trip that i never forgot.

Answer 2

many thing was=>were

we took a boat rode => ride

others exciting =>other thôi bn nhé

many beautiful photo in here (bỏ)

band score :5.0=>6.0