IELTS Academic Writing task 1 - Bar chart

Question

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the yearly footfall of three museums in London from 2007 to 2012. 

In general, the National Gallery and the British Museum increased in popularity in five years. Meanwhile, the Victoria and Albert Museum’s annual visitor number has overall fallen and become the least visited, although it did experience a rise in visitors.

In 2007, six million visitors came to the National Gallery, which is about half of the number of people who opted for the other two museums. However, the Gallery experienced a steady growth shortly after and reached 17 million visitors at the end of 2012. The British Museum remains the second popular museum in most of the period, though it has seen a great fluctuation: roughly twelve million, six million and fourteen million visitors in 2017, 2009 and 2012 respectively.

Regarding the Victoria and Albert Museum, it has the highest footfall of the three destinations (14 million in 2007). Nonetheless, this number dropped dramatically to approximately seven million in 2010 and has since then been the least popular attraction compared to the other two museums.

Answer 1

Have some mistakes in the grammar and vocabs. You should use more synonym words to get the higher band.

Example : footfalt -> the number of vistors per year.

overall fallen -> overall fell/decrease (fallen is verb)

Comments

Mình hỏi chút nữa được không ạ, theo như mình tra trên Cambridge Dictionary thì footfall có nghĩa là the number of people who go into a shop or business for a particular amount of time. Vậy vì sao không được dùng trong trường hợp này ạ?

Và nếu được thì bạn nghĩ mình được bao nhiêu điểm ietls ạ (vì mình đang có định hướng thi nên biết điểm số thì càng tốt ạ). Mình cảm ơn ạ.