IELTS Task 2 Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons and disadvantages of this trend?

Question

Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the reasons and disadvantages of this trend?

 

It is widely agreed that having babies later would have many benefits for their life. But I completely believe that these drawbacks and disadvantages are outweighed by these benefits for citizens.

 

On the one hand, nowadays, it is a general trend that more and more women expect to have a baby after they become a successful girl in career or gain some target, which have been planned when they are young. In modern society, the roles of these women are really important in comparison with about 10 or 20 years ago. Additionally, although a lot of couples give a decision to get married soon but they accept that delay having children. I think that these couples want to have a sustainable background about financial or physiological health when they become parents of these children in the future. I would say that it is the  suitable reason to contribute to these nuclear families for the community. 

 

However, I agree that there are some personal reasons why a woman should not decide to wait to have kids. Firstly, Nowadays, the people who are pregnant after 35 age periods, are considered as having a child later. In this age period, these mothers are warned by many doctors that the highest percentage of miscarriage is about 30-40%. Following this, health problems after reproduction are really serious. There is much evidence that most died cases of women belong to this group. Secondly, delay having kids leads to decreased fertility or creates a child is disabled body. It is one of the main reasons that have effects, ranging from the burden of society. 

 

In conclusion, it seems to me that the dangers of matter are more significant than possible benefits.       

 

Answer 1

1. "...ater would have many benefits for their life" -> their lives

2. "Additionally, although a lot of couples give a decision to get married.." -> I think we should use only "decide" to be more natural. Sometimes,  use much noun phrase make the essay overlong.

3. " ... are pregnant after 35 age periods, are considered as having..." -> "considered to be" or just only "considered having"

4. Secondly, delay having kids leads to decreased .. -> leads to have decrease/ leads to decrease

These are some grammatic mistakes that i found. Your essay is still quite tho