Bài IELTS task 2 - Some people become famous at an early age. Is it bad or good? Discuss and give your opinion.

Question

Some people become famous at an early age. Is it bad or good? Discuss and give your opinion.
     In the modern society, being famous at a very young age is very easy. Not only talent but hard-work are also needed for being famous. It is supposed that being famous early hasve many benefits while some people find out that being as a star at a young age is the worst thing. This essay will discuss this problemfrom both points of view.
     A child or even an adult, needs to face many complicated social issues to become famous. Although you are young, and not mature, however, everyone would turn back you in a second for what you did. Also, being famous from a young age, the children barely have time to attend classes, or even they can't finish school.
     Besides, these young people, after the embrace of social media, they get the opportunity to imitate their favourite idolss. Once they achieve considerable followers or feedback, they imprinted in their small mind a good feeling. For example, regarding the latest study conducted in the UK shows, almost 20% of social media celebrity was under the age of 18, whose felt proud for being followed by a huge number of people including adults. Therefore, early becoming known in publicity give rise to a positive emotional feeling for this achievement.
     In a nutshell, although there are many advantages, mentioned before, disadvantages overweight advantages, which is very dangerous. As the benefits and disadvantages I illustrated before, I think being famous from very early is very dangerous.
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