describe a person who has influence on you. (150 words)

Question

To be honest, the person who influenced me the most is my father. He guaranteed me and is a friend and role model.

He is a 60-year-old man and boss of a big restaurant. In terms of personality, he is a strict and kind-hearted person who always helps people. He is indeed a father and friend to me as he always gives me worth advice and always is there for me through all the ups and downs of my life. He is important to me, so I always ask his opinion in order to make up my mind. Although he is up to my neck in work, he has taken care of me thoughtfully. We usually go on family outings to the movies on weekends. My father usually prepared breakfast for me when I was a child. He is a promotion so that I advance more on learning.

The person who I am now is mostly because of my father's devotion and dedication. Therefore, I always look up to and love him a lot. 

 

Answer 1

He is indeed a father and friend to me as he always gives me worth advice and always is there for me through all the ups and downs of my life.

 

Well, I think you should use less sentences with the tructure: " he is a ...." cuz it's a little bit boring.