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''There are too many reality show on tv'' . Do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays ,there are a lot of choices for people to watch and relax after a long day of work or study such as reality shows, films, news programs, sports programs,… on various channels of television. In my opinion, there are not many reality shows on TV for the following reasons.

Firstly, the duration of reality shows per day on television with other programs is clearly divided. Producers of TV shows would determine and arrange the most suitable and effective way for reality TV get aired not only to ensure the variety of programs on channels but also attract more people to watch those. Moreover , reality TV only occurs for a certain part of the week , which means it appears on television with a moderate schedule and only maximum telecast two hours at the weekends.

 
On the other hand, some people may argue that reality shows which were shown too much on one channel or another would make viewers boring. This could be true to some extent, but it is far from true when we consider other side effects as well.The reality shows have been fun, engaging and acquaint society with new points of view which helps viewers to update more social information. Last but not least ,in the wake of a monotonous day at work, it is decent to return home and watch reality shows on television to amuse and ease the mind .

To conclude, I think the various reality shows on television are indeed an amazing thing for the watchers in the age of developing entertainment .
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the duration of reality shows per day on television with other programs is clearly divided -> are

Producers of TV shows would determine and arrange the most suitable and effective way for reality SHOWS WHICH get aired DO not only ensure the variety of programs on channels but also attract more people to watch those. -> will

Give more examples for your explannation.

 

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Thanks so much for answering and giving me a helpful advice about my essay . But as I see , you use inversion in  this sentence : ''Producers of TV shows would determine and arrange the most suitable and effective way for reality SHOWS WHICH get aired DO not only ensure the variety of programs on channels but also attract more people to watch those'' . The structure of inversion of not only... but also ... is ''Not only + auxiliary verb + S + V + but ... also ....'' so why you write ''DO'' before NOT ONLY? 

Can you answer this question for me ?  I am wrong , aren't I ? I hope you can reply .

 

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I think that the statement simply hasn't been approached and discovered in all aspects.

Also, as a reader, I'm kinda confused by the logic of the essay in the penultimate paragraph. It just.... doesn't feel right to me, personally.

However, it's lovely, the effort you put into the essay!

Peace!!
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Thanks so much for answering and giving me a helpful advice about my essay. I am just starting to write task 2, and when I wrote this essay, I am a bit confused about my statement. I will try harder in next essay . Thank you again.


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