Bài IELTS Task 2 sáng 14/3 - IDP Hà Nội_ advertisements negative or positive development? [closed]

Question

In recent years, sales promotion are overwhelmingly in people's daily lives. While some people think that advertisements have negative effects on humans, I believe that they also have their own benefits, and I will explain that in this essay.

There are a whole host of reasons why some people think that advertisements are detrimental to humans. Firstly, since advertisements have eye-catching images and repeat on TV many times, they trigger people's shopping desires. Consequently, people will buy more products even the items beyond their ability to afford, which leads people to carry the burden of finance. Moreover, because some products on advertisements are not familiar with the products that customers receive in real-life, the majority of these customers will be frustrated when their shopping decisions based mainly on promotion.

However, advertisements can also are beneficial to both customers and manufacturers in many ways. Firstly, by watching advertisements on Tv channels or the Internet regularly, people can have more information about a variety of products. This means that they will have more conscious when they shopping and get better choices. For example, if a pregnant women watch milk promotion on the Tv channels, she will know what kind of milk is suitable for her baby. Additionally, because of the buying phenomenon, advertisements can accelerate the national economy. In fact, when the shopping demand of humans increase, companies can sell more items and broaden their business. As a result, companies will recruit more workers and unemployment problems are solved. 

In conclusion, although promotion can cause several undesirable impacts on humans, its benefits will be far more significant.

 

Answer 1

In recent years, sales promotion are is overwhelmingly in people's daily lives. While some people think that advertisements have negative effects on humans, I believe that they also have their own benefits, and I will explain that this point of view in this essay.

There are a whole host of reasons why some people think that advertisements are detrimental to humans. Firstly, since advertisements have eye-catching images and repeat on TV many times, they trigger people's shopping desires. Consequently, people will buy more products even the items beyond their ability to afford, which leads (people) to carrying the burden of finance. Moreover, because some products on advertisements are not familiar with the products that customers receive in real-life, the majority of these customers will be frustrated when their shopping decisions bases mainly on promotion.

However, advertisements can also are beneficial to both customers and manufacturers in many ways. Firstly, by watching advertisements on Tv channels or the Internet regularly, people can have more information about a variety of products. This means that they will have become more conscious when they shopping and get better choices. For example, if a pregnant women woman watches milk promotion on the Tv channels, she will know what kind of milk is suitable for her baby. Additionally, because of the buying phenomenon, advertisements can accelerate the national economy. In fact, when the shopping demand of humans increases, companies can sell more items and broaden their business. As a result, companies will recruit more workers and unemployment problems are solved. 

In conclusion, although promotion can cause several undesirable impacts on humans, its benefits will be far more significant.

Comments

bạn ơi, sao từ overwhelmingly phải sửa thành overwhelming vậy, sau tobe có thể là trạng từ mà

với lại sao từ carry sau động từ to mà lại thêm ing vậy

giải thích giúp mình với

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tại thường sau tobe + tính từ ^^ trạng từ cũng có nhưng ít người dùng cấu trúc đó lắm

lead to + noun á bạn mà carry là verb nên phải V_ing để thành noun nha

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cảm ơn bạn nhé. Bạn giúp mình chấm điểm bài việt này được không, sắp thi rồi mà chưa biết band của mình ở đâu nữa