Ielts task 1

Question

The table illustrates information about the sales of five well-known brands of mobile phone over six years from 2006 to 2012.
     As is observed, there are three trends showed in the data: the expenditure of two brands surged ceaselessly, two brands had a sharply decline and one brand presented a negative  fluctuation by the end of the period.
    According to the table, Samsung and Apple sketched out a noticeable upward trend in sales during six-year period. Samsung had a highest turnover at 396.5 million in 2012 - the last year of period. Meanwhile, Apple started with the lowest of sales rate at 2.3 million in 2007; however, this uplifted significantly roughly 136 million by the end of the period, became the third highest position.
   On the contrary, Ericsson and Motorota had a descending trend. Ericsson’s turnover achieved the highest point at 102 million and nosedived swiftly during the next years. They dropped the lowest number of sales, each reached 28 million in 2012. Last but not least, Nokia’s sales reached the remarkable point at 475 million in 2008 before fell slightly in 2009. That process then repeated itself from 2010 to 2012. It had a higher sales rate than Apple with total 335 million in 2012.

Answer 1

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The table illustrates information about the sales of five well-known brands of mobile phones for over six years from 2006 to 2012.
     As is observed, there are three trends showed in the data: the expenditure of two brands surged ceaselessly, two brands had a sharp decline and one brand presented a negative fluctuation by the end of the period.
    According to the table, Samsung and Apple sketched out a noticeable upward trend in sales for six years. Samsung had the highest turnover at 396.5 million in 2012 - the last year of the period. Meanwhile, Apple started with the lowest of sales rate at 2.3 million in 2007; however, this uplifted significantly roughly 136 million by the end of the period, became the third-highest position.
   On the contrary, Ericsson and Motorola had a descending trend. Ericsson’s turnover achieved the highest point at 102 million and nosedived swiftly during the next years. They dropped the lowest number of sales, each reached 28 million in 2012. Last but not least, Nokia’s sales reached a remarkable point at 475 million in 2008 before fell slightly in 2009. That process then repeated itself from 2010 to 2012. It had a higher sales rate than Apple with a total 335 million in 2012.

Band: 5.8

Answer 2

nhìn chung tớ thấy ý tưởng bài b cũng khá ổn. nhưng bên cạnh đó, bên nên để ý hơn về ngữ pháp nhé. ví dụ như:

"Samsung had a highest  ->the highest"

"had a sharply decline -> a sharp"