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As a student,I'm always busy with my schooling , I rarely have freetime but when I have freetime,I often spend time listening music. It can be said that music is the best cure for my souls, and it can help me relax after a long tired learning day . Music makes me happy and more optimistic. I really need music to concentrate during the time I'm doing homework or any kind of works . Not only that, whenever , whatevr I do , everything have music . Sometime I hear music with my friends and I think they like them too . I used to listen to . . . music, and their music conveys meaningful messages life . It can be a happy song or sad song but there is alway a way I can relate to it . I guess that is another reason. I love to hear music because I can relate to what is going on in my life . Music is like my daily hobby and I don't know what I would do if music didn't exist .
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I often spend time listening music => I often spend time on listening to music ( bạn có thể tham khảo ở đây https://tienganhtflat.com/tatrunghoc/ngu-phap-cau-truc-voi-spend-va-waste )

 

and it can help me relax after a long tired learning day = > and it can help me relax after a long tiring learning day

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hoặc câu này có thể sửa là and it can help me relax after I feel tired from a learning day. Mình xin lưu ý ngoài lề một tí, là bạn không nên sửa thành it can help me relax after I feel tired of a learning day,  vì:

Be tried of : chán ngán vì

Be tired from : mệt mỏi vì 

 

whenever , whatevr I do = > whenever , whatever I do

 

everything have music = > everything has music

 

Sometime I hear  = >  Sometimes I hear

 

there is alway = > there is always

 

I love to hear music = > I love to hear the music

Đây là bài của bạn sau khi sửa những ý trên: 

As a student, I'm always busy with my schooling, I rarely have freetime but when I have freetime,I often spend time on listening to music. It can be said that music is the best cure for my souls, and it can help me relax after a long tiring learning day. Music makes me happy and more optimistic. I really need music to concentrate during the time I'm doing homework or any kind of works. Not only that, whenever, whatever I do, everything has music. Sometimes I hear music with my friends and I think they like them too. I used to listen to . . . music, and their music conveys meaningful messages life. It can be a happy song or sad song but there is always a way I can relate to it. I guess that is another reason. I love to hear the music because I can relate to what is going on in my life. Music is like my daily hobby and I don't know what I would do if music didn't exist.

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As a student,I'm always busy with my schooling , I rarely have freetime but when I have freetime,I often spend time on listening to music. It can be said that music is the best cure for my souls, and it can help me relax after a long tired learning day . Music makes me happy and more optimistic. I really need music to concentrate during the time I'm doing homework or any kind of works . Not only that, whenever , whatever I do , everything has music . Sometimes I hear music with my friends and I think they like them too . I used to listen to . . . music, and their music conveys meaningful messages life . It can be a happy song or sad song but there is alway a way I can relate to it . I guess that is another reason. I love to hear music because I can relate to what is going on in my life . Music is like my daily hobby and I don't know what I would do if music didn't exist .

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