describe a party you have been to

Question

on monday last week biu invited me to come his birthday party  ats his house . the party was celebrated very big  and was decorated so beautiful with balloons candles and flowers ...there was a lot of people there and they gave biu very many cards and presents . in there they played very many games  and have prizes for the winners. the food and drink were very good and unique .after he had blown out the candles on the cake,  we sang the song happy birthday for him and then we started dancing follow the the songs. the birthday party finished at 11pm after that i and people cleaned his house and leaved . we felt very interested and happy.

Answer 1

Chào bạn.

Theo mình,bạn đã rất có ý tưởng trong việc tìm ý và hành văn,mình thấy bạn đã làm điều này rất tốt.Tuy nhiên,mình vẫn có một số góp ý như sau:

      -Cụm từ ''on monday last week'' thì có thể đổi thành''last monday''

      -''The party was celebrated very big and was decorated so beautiful with balloons candles and flowers'' thì mình nghĩ chỉ cần là''the party was very big and it was decorated so beautiful with many ballons candles and flowers''

      -''The food and drink were very good and unique'' thành ''The food and drink were very good and special''

      -''We felt very interested and happy" thành ''We felt very fun and happy''

Còn nữa,bạn cũng nên xem lại ngữ pháp và động từ bất quy tắc một chút.Như ở chỗ ''There was a lot of people'' chẳng hạn.People là số nhiều,đượng nhiên phải là ''There were''...

Còn về phần động từ bất quy tắc thì từ''leaved'' cần chuyển thành ''left''

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