In some countries,young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.agree or disagree??
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The moment between finish high school and starting university studies is considered as a single most important mark in everyone’life.In other words,a best possible start in young people’life _future owners of the world ,Therefore,travelling or working for a year right at the time is a effective orentation to help youngers learn how to adapt to new environments out of their school.

Particularly ,when high school students have chance to work to make living independently ,even don’t need to fiscal allowance from their parents ,they will understand value of money deeply .Consequently,they will take in how hard their parent work to earn money to feed them.Moreover,once these students challenge themself with different part-time jobs ,they will receive precious experiences as well as discover their real passion,exactly authentic talents inside,which will have significant contribution in future vocational orientation.for example,my brother who decided to take entrance exam to economic university in danang city,changed his decision after a volenteer program right in the summer when he had just graduated from high school.thank to this program,he realized that he is interesting in teaching kids after teaching poor students at remote areas.Eventually,he became a great teacher and gained certain successes in his job.More important ,he feel hapy being a teacher.

However,behind considerable advangtages ,it still exist particular disadvantages .it is undeniable that if students decided to work or travel for a year with being well-equipped about various practical knowlegde together with living experience,their innocent mind is vulnerable to be hurt ,even lead to ill-mental problems.For instance ,my own first hand experience is that when I had a part-time job at a fastfood delivery services .I had to work 5 hours a day and delivered  fastfood contineously during that 5 hours.But when I delivered a bit late due to trafic jam or some other reasons on the road ,customers were usually dissatisfied  and even aggressive to me .Honestly ,these difficulties as well as the pressure  are too awful for me to accept .

 

To sum up,every one need to take a careful consideration before deciding what to do to avoid unexpected results .However ,I still wanna share a quotation I love most “a rolling stone get no moss ”take a in-depth look at the message  and do anything you want .
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Good afternoon daisy huynh, I am sorry for the late reply, I have read your essay and I think in terms of an Opinion essay, it is fine to have these points. Just some minor mistakes by spelling and grammars that you should pay attention. Otherwise, you might lose your points

The moment time between finishing high school and starting university studies is considered as a single most important mark in everyone’life.In other words,it is a best possible start in young people’life _future owners of the world ,Therefore,travelling or working for a year right at the time is a effective orentation  orentation to help youngers learn how to adapt to new environments outside of their school.
Particularly ,when high school students have chance to work to make their living independently ,even don’t need to fiscal allowance from their parents (unnecessary) ,they will understand value of money deeply .Consequently,they will take in how hard their parent work to earn money to feed them.Moreover,once these students challenge themself with different part-time jobs ,they will receive precious experiences as well as discover their real passion,exactly authentic talents inside,which will have significant contribution in future vocational orientation.for example,my brother who decided to take entrance exam to economic university in danang city,changed his decision after a volenteer (spelling) program right in the summer when he had just graduated from high school.thanks to this program,he realized that he is was interestinged in teaching kids after teaching poor students at remote areas.Eventually,he became a great teacher and gained certain successes in his job.More importantly ,he feels hapy being a teacher.
 

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However,behind considerable advangtages ,it still exist particular disadvantages .it is undeniable that if students decided to work or travel for a year with being well-equipped about various practical knowlegde together with living experience,their innocent mind is too vulnerable that they can be hurt easily ,even lead to ill-mental problems.For instance ,my own first hand experience is that when I had a part-time job at a fastfood delivery services .I had to work 5 hours a day and delivered  fastfood contineously during that 5 hours.But when I delivered a bit late due to trafic jam or some other reasons on the road ,customers were usually dissatisfied  and even aggressive to me .Honestly ,these difficulties as well as the pressure  are too awful hard for me to accept .
To sum up,every one needs to take a careful consideration before deciding what to do to avoid unexpected results .However ,I still wanna share a quotation I love most “a rolling stone get no moss ”take a in-depth look at the message  and do anything you want .

Regards,Duong NGUYEN

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:đây là góp ý của mình

Moreover,once these students challenge themself ( themselves) ( mình nghĩ viết thế này tốt hơn: experience a variety part-time jobs) with different part-time jobs ,they will receive precious experiences as well as discover their real passion,exactly authentic talents inside,which will have significant contribution in ( to) future vocational orientation

my brother who decided to take entrance exam to economic university in danang city,changed his decision after a volenteer program right in the summer  ( after joining a volenteer....) when he had just graduated from high school( o dây mình không hiểu tại sao bạn lại dùng quá khứ hoàn thành mình nghĩ graduated la dc rồi)

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