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Hello teacher! My name is Ngoc. I’m a member of group 3. Today, I will tell you about our favorite activities in leisure time.

 There are many activities but in my group almost people are like to play sports. There are 2 kind of sports: team sports and individual sports. Team sports such as football, volleyball, basketball, ect. But I think the most popular sport is football. It normally lasts 90 minutes each match. Football played between 2 teams of 11 players each team. The objective of the game is to score by directing the ball into the opposite goal. The winner is the team which has scored most goal at the end of the match. Play football has a lot of benefits. Firstly, play football is a good way to relieve stress and reduce depression. Secondly, they can find friends who have the same hobby. Moreover, sports can help develop teamwork and leadership skills.

Individual sports such as cycling, swimming, running, ect. But my group like swimming most. To go swimming you only need a swimming suit, goggles and money to buy ticket. Swimming has four main stroke. They’re crawl stroke, beast stroke, back stroke and butterfly srtoke. Swimming has many benefits too. Firstly,it helps you keep fit and stay healthy. Secondly, swimming also keep you safe in the water. Besides, swimming helps you relax after hard- working hours. There’s nothing better than jumping into the water in hot weather in summer.

In conclusion, I think playing sports has a lot of benefits so it is the best leisure activity in your free time for teenagers. Thank you for your reading.
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Hello teacher! My name is Ngoc. I’m a member of group 3. Today, I will tell you about our favorite activities in leisure time.

 There are many activities but in my group almost people are like to play sports. There are 2 kind of sports: team sports and individual sports. Team sports such as football, volleyball, basketball, ect. But I think the most popular sports is football. It normally lasts 90 minutes each match. Football plays between 2 teams of 11 players each team. The objective of the game is to score by directing the ball into the opposite goal. The winner is the team which has scored most goal at the end of the match. Play football has a lot of benefits. Firstly, play football is a good way to relieve stress and reduce depression. Secondly, they can find friends who have the same hobby. Moreover, sports can help develop teamwork and leadership skills.

Individual sports such as cycling, swimming, running, ect. But my group like swimming most. To go swimming you only need a swimming suit, goggles and money to buy ticket. Swimming has four main stroke. They’re crawl stroke, beast stroke, back stroke and butterfly srtoke. Swimming has many benefits too. Firstly,it helps you keep fit and stay healthy. Secondly, swimming also keep you safe in the water. Besides, swimming helps you relax after hard- working hours. There’s nothing better than jumping into the water in hot weather in summer.

In conclusion, I think playing sports has a lot of benefits so it is the best leisure activity in your free time for teenagers. Thank you for your reading.

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Hello teacher! My name is Ngoc. I’m a member of group 3. Today, I will tell you about our favorite activities in leisure time.

 There are many activities but in my group almost people are like to play sports. There are 2 ( number dưới mười thì bạn nên viết chữ nhé) kind of sports: team sports and individual sports. Team sports such as football, volleyball, basketball, ect. But I think the most popular sport is football. It normally lasts 90 minutes each match. Football played between 2 teams of 11 players for each team. The objective of the game is to score by directing the ball into the opposite goal. The winner is the team which has scored most goal at the end of the match. Play football has a lot of benefits. Firstly, play football is a good way to relieve ( với stress nên dùng release hoặc reduce nhé) stress and reduce depression. Secondly, they can find friends who have the same hobby. Moreover, sports can help develop teamwork and leadership skills.

Individual sports such as cycling, swimming, running, ect. But my group like swimming most. To go swimming you only need a swimming suit, goggles and money to buy ticket. Swimming has four main stroke. They’re crawl stroke, beast stroke, back stroke and butterfly srtoke. Swimming has many benefits too. Firstly,it helps you keep fit and stay healthy. Secondly, swimming also keep you safe in the water. Besides, swimming helps you relax after hard- working hours. There’s nothing better than jumping into the water in hot weather in summer.

In conclusion, I think playing sports has a lot of benefits so it is the best leisure activity in your free time for teenagers. Thank you for your reading.

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