Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs the society in which they are sold. [closed]

Question

It is sometimes argued that the big revenue of companies is based on the power of advertising without the needs of consumers. In my opinion, I partly agree with this view.

On the one hand, advertisement is important to increase the sales in some ways. Firstly, goods can be easily come close to customers. When a product of a business is  not advertised on TV, on the Internet as well as magazines, we are difficult to know and buy it to consume. Secondly, products become  more attractive through advertisement and we have to pay attention to those on the first look. In my experience, 90% of young people in Vietnam choose colorful products promoted on the media without considering carefully. It is clear that the power of advertising has undeniable benefits.

On the other hand, there are a variety of factors apart from advertisement impacting on the sales. The most convincing argument is that the needs of the population, which allows business to rise quickly their profit. If customers have no need , producers will be unable to persuade them to use, like convincing a vegetarian to buy meat for their meals. Another reason is that whether consumers’ budget is enough or not. It is common sense that the poor often only buy  the real necessary products serving for their lives.

In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I accept advertisement can be essential for businesses to grow up their sales, but I believe that there are other reasons besides advertisement.

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