Benefit of Smartphone

Question

Nowaday ,Smartphone is very popular in our life.Thank to smartphone,we have some following benefits:

First of all,Smartphone is used to communication.You can use it to make phone calls,send and receive messages in anywhere.

Moreover,it is also used for entertainment.You can use it to listen to music as well as play games,... service for our entertainment at the same time.

Finally,you can stay in touch it very easy to surf the web,use maps to look for places,start a communication with your friends at any moment.

Beside some benefits,smartphones also have some harms such as:nerve damage,eyesight worse and so on.In conclusion,if you know how to use it right way ,you will have many advantages to do manythings.

Answer 1

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Answer 2

First of all,Smartphone is used to communication. -> to communicate 
Moreover => Second,it is also used for entertainment.You can use it to listen to music as well as play games,... service for our entertainment at the same time.
you can stay in touch (2 vế nó chả liên quan và bổ sung gì cho nhau) it very easy to surf the web,use maps to look for places,start a communication with your friends at any moment.
Bài này viết chưa chặt chẽ, đang nói về benefit thì k nên đưa phần cuối vào