Bài IELTS Task 2 sáng 1/6/2017- IDP Thái Nguyên- tourist and local [closed]

Question

Write about the topic :

According to an international travel magazine, many tourists today fly straight to their holiday resort and almost never leave it. Unlike tourists in the 1960s and '70s, they return home with no experience of the loacl culture.

why do you think this happens ? How was tourism diferent in the past?

 

 

 

         These days, many torists fly straight to their holiday resort and stay there. It is different wirh tourists in the past , they return home with no experience of the local culture.

     I believe in the past , visitors stayed at a local house because lack of hotels. They can understand and experience of the local house . The ability to access information was limited.  People need to came to real places to explore local culture.

     Nowadays, people are very busy with hetic schedules and heavy workload. They will just want to stay at hotels and resorts to relax. Beside , people are not intersted in the local culture because they have other more intersting. For example, tourism have many types of entertainment such as games, music show and animal cirus. People not enjoy the local culture. Furthermore , the ability to access information about travel when they use technology equipment such as smart phone , laptop and computer.

     Another reason is that now have many hotels and resorts. The intersted of local house, people stay at a hotel and a resort. Because the hotels and the resort have modern equipments. Many tourists have advanced equipment and tourists may enjoy these facilities without going out.

    In conclusion, tourisms are different between in the past and nowadays. There are many reason for why tourist do not explorer local place in their holiday, but in front of these reason is different of view and life style as a technology and modernization.

Answer 1

Hi, mình nghĩ bài viết này bạn cần cẩn thận hơn về mặt chính tả vì bạn sai ctả nhiều lắm mà như vậy sẽ mất điểm rất uổng

vd như tourists thì bạn viết nhầm thành torists, wirh thay vì with, hetic -> hectic, intersted -> interested, cirus -> circus

Ngoài ra bạn còn gặp mấy lỗi sau:

visitors stayed at a local house because lack of hotels --> visitors stayed at a local house because of the lack of hotels

sau need to dùng nguyên mẫu là come

People not enjoy the local culture --> People do not enjoy the local culture

Tourist do not explorer -->  Tourists do not explore

these reason is different of view and life style--> these reasons are different from view and lifestyle

Dùng "music show" thật ra cũng đc nhưng mình nghĩ bạn dùng "concert" nghe sẽ hay hơn 

Mong là ph sửa này giúp đc bạn ph nào. Chúc bạn học tốt nhé ^^

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