your best friend

Question

hello everybody . A person said that no man was whole of himself, his friends were the rest of him. I am sure everyone of us has at least one best friend. Me too, so today I'm talking about my best friend. But I'll reveal her name after. We have studied together since 2012. By the end of the year 2018 we will have been learning together for 7 years. She's not tall. However she always says that she had a ideal height. She is petite and cute. I like her big eyes and her bobbing hair. She is very hard. I think she is as busy as a bee. And january 27th 2000 is the day which she was born. 16 years later she won first prize  contest. I'm realy a little bit jealous. But only a little bit, a little bit. Because she is my best friend. Unlike An và Thuy, I can't share with her every secret. But nothing' s gonna change my belife for her. As you all know she is a exemplary student. She is sitting at the 2nd table, next Tuan. She is Dung. Finally,I'm sharing with everybody the famous sentence:'' Friends are people you can talk to without words, when you have to". Thank for listening.

Answer 1

Hello everybody . A person said that no man was whole of himself, his friends were the rest of him. I am sure everyone of us has at least one best friend. Me too => là văn viết nên thay bằng "So do I", so today I'm talking about my best friend. But I'll reveal her name after => chỗ này mình nghĩ thay bằng "later". We have studied together=> thay bằng "have been classmates" vì study mang nghĩa nghiên cứu since 2012. By the end of the year 2018 we will have been learning together for 7 years. She's not tall. However she always says that she had => has a ideal height. She is petite and cute. I like her big eyes and her bobbing hair. She is very hard => chắc ý bạn là "hard-working" đúng không?. I think she is as busy as a bee. And january 27th 2000 is the day which she was born. 16 years later she won first prize contest. I'm realy a little bit jealous. But only a little bit, a little bit. Because she is my best friend. Unlike An và Thuy, I can't share with her every secret. But nothing' s gonna change my belife => belief for her. Đoạn này của bạn mình không hiểu. Ý là bạn có thể kể với cô ấy mọi chuyện hay là không thể kể nhưng vẫn tin cô ấy? As you all know she is a => "an" exemplary student. She is sitting at the 2nd table, next Tuan. She is Dung. Finally,I'm sharing with everybody the famous sentence:'' Friends are people you can talk to without words, when you have to". Thank for listening.

Answer 2

Bạn kia sửa đúng hết rồi chỉ còn một chỗ sót là phần "a ideal height" ==> "an ideal height" thôi. Mình nghĩ văn phong này nghiêng về văn nói nhiều hơn. Mình thấy câu cuối bạn ghi là "Thanks for listening" nên mình đoán đây là bài bạn chuẩn bị để nói trước lớp. Nếu mục đích viết cho người đọc thì nên thay lại thành "Thanks for reading"