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Question

It is argued that sport plays an important role on student life. while reasons can be given to justify this, I believe that sport should be added to school curriculum as an option.

There are those who argue that it is compulsory for students to learn physical subjects at school. The reason for this is that enjoying outdoor activities have a profound effect on the health of students. These days, students often spend amount of time sitting in their desk to take lessons and do their homework, which can cause them to lead a sedentary lifestyle. As a result, this can increase the risk of facing with health problems such as obesity and stress. For example, my uncle told me that the lack of physical activities was a main reason which made his daughter become seriously overweight. Therefore, playing is of paramount importance, which helps students balance their life to live a health lifestyle.

However some people believe that sport should be not part of the core curriculum. Firstly, learning a new subject can put a number of students under pressure. They are not adept at playing sports, which may result in them putting more effort into this subject in order to keep up with their classmates. Hence, this may make them feel stressful. Secondly, if sport is a compulsory subject, the government have to invest heavily in building the school of construction.

In conclusion, although it is necessary for students to play sport at school, I firmly hold the view that sport should be a optional subject.

Answer 1

It is argued that sport plays an important role on (in) student life. while reasons can be given to justify this, I believe that sport should be added to school curriculum as an option.

There are those who argue that it is compulsory for students to learn physical subjects (physical education) at school. The reason for this is that enjoying outdoor activities have a profound effect on the health of students. These days, students often spend  ( large) amount of time sitting in (at) their desk to take lessons and do their homework, which can cause them to lead a sedentary lifestyle. As a result, this can increase the risk of facing with health problems such as obesity and stress. For example, my uncle told me that the lack of physical activities was a main reason which made his daughter become seriously overweight. Therefore, playing ( tớ nghĩ nên dùng playing sports để cho rõ nghĩa)  of paramount importance, which helps students balance their life to live a health (healthy) lifestyle.

However some people believe that sport should be not part of the core curriculum. Firstly, learning a new subject can put a number of students under pressure. They are not adept at playing sports, which may result in them putting more effort into this subject in order to keep up with their classmates. Hence, this may make them feel stressful. Secondly, if sport is a compulsory subject, the government have to invest heavily in building the school of construction. ( construction/faclilities of schools

In conclusion, although it is necessary for students to play sport at school, I firmly hold the view that sport should be a optional subject.

 

Bài viết của bạn bố cục rất rõ ràng, ngắn gọn, mạch lạc , sủ dụng nhiều từ nối. Quan điểm khá thuyết phục.

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Answer 2

It is argued that sport plays an important role on (in) student life. while reasons can be given to justify this, I believe that sport should be added to school curriculum as an option.

There are those who argue that it is compulsory for students to learn physical subjects (physical education) at school. The reason for this is that enjoying outdoor activities have a profound effect on the health of students. These days, students often spend  ( large) amount of time sitting in (at) their desk to take lessons and do their homework, which can cause them to lead a sedentary lifestyle. As a result, this can increase the risk of facing with health problems such as obesity and stress. For example, my uncle told me that the lack of physical activities was a main reason which made his daughter become seriously overweight. Therefore, playing ( tớ nghĩ nên dùng playing sports để cho rõ nghĩa)  of paramount importance, which helps students balance their life to live a health (healthy) lifestyle.

However some people believe that sport should be not part of the core curriculum. Firstly, learning a new subject can put a number of students under pressure. They are not adept at playing sports, which may result in them putting more effort into this subject in order to keep up with their classmates. Hence, this may make them feel stressful. Secondly, if sport is a compulsory subject, the government have to invest heavily in building the school of construction. ( construction/faclilities of schools

In conclusion, although it is necessary for students to play sport at school, I firmly hold the view that sport should be a optional subject.

 

Bài viết của bạn bố cục rất rõ ràng, ngắn gọn, mạch lạc , sủ dụng nhiều từ nối. Quan điểm khá thuyết phục.

Tuy nhiên, bạn nên post lại toàn bộ câu hỏi , yêu cầu của bài vào trang viết để mọi người đánh giá đầy đủ hơn 

Well done !