The benefits of facebook.

Question

There is no doubt over the benefits that facebook brings. Frist and formost, facebook is a website which helps our make friends easily. Should you are a shy personal and your communication is very bad, it will provide several features such chatting, personal messaging and calling, which enables you talk to other people without feeling puzzl. Moreover, we are able to connect with others around the world, which is not only help our have many friends but also increase my knowledge about other countries. Besides, facebook always updates news for us, as far as possible. Although we don't stay in Paris, for example, we can know exactly the massacre which happen in november 13th 2015. A large number of documents to serve studing are found easly on the facebook. Finally, many applications of facebook helps our relax after working hard. We are able to update status, share photos or just enjoy ouselves by playing thousands of games. For all the reasons above, I think facebook is one of the most important website in our life, so we use it more and more.

Answer 1

You should type the whole question here so that I know whether it is "Opinion/Discussion/two-question essays".

Regarding the structure, this is basically just a paragraph, not an essay at all. I also recommend that you should check spelling carefully!

There is no doubt over the benefits that facebook brings. Frist First and formost, facebook is a website which helps our us make friends easily. Should you are a shy personal person and your communication is very bad, it will provide several features such chatting, personal messaging and calling, which enables you to talk to other people without feeling puzzl. Moreover, we are able to connect with others around the world, which is not only help our us have many friends but also increase my our knowledge about other countries. Besides, facebook always updates news for us, as far as possible. Although we don't stay in Paris, for example, we can know exactly the massacre which happen in November 13th 2015. A large number of documents to serve studing studying are found easly easily on the facebook. Finally, many applications of facebook helps our us relax after working hard. We are able to update status, share photos or just enjoy ouselves by playing thousands of games. For all the reasons above, I think facebook is one of the most important website in our life, so we use it more and more.

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