people have dreamed of living in perfect society.What,in your opinion, the most important element of it.What cAn people do to create ideal society

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MỌI NGƯỜI XEM VÀ GÓP Ý GIÚP E VÌ E TỰ HỌC CŨNG KHÔNG BIẾT GÌ NHÌU.EM CẢM ƠN Ạ

Since history, human have had a desire of living in a ideal comminity .However, it is tough to imgine how a perfect society look like in each people 's opinion,and what the most vital factor in building it

In my point of view, it can be said that there are many conceptions about the wonderful society. I believe that there are many points but safey is the key for future society.It 's the symbol for basic freedom.For example,no crime peole can leave their house with unlocked door or we can be protected by the law and no accident ,no doubt and everybody can trust anyone when they first meet.Living in safety make people have no strees and no space for worrying .

From the evidence I noticed above , in order to create a perfect society ,each country should vote for good and dedicated leaders nd polician to account .I think it is the most important issue that people should do in the process of buiding a good communicaty firsly.Secondly why don't we make our society full of love and excitement. Let's talk with a new neighbour,make with many friend and treat other better.Morever  good environmental condition will give us a good life .Joining a hand to clean the streetor collect the garbage or take part in riding bike campagne,we can contribute to protect the earth by a small part like that.

For these reason,I belive we can live in a perfect society in the coming years

Answer 1

Since history, human( minh nghi la people) have had a desire of living in a (an)  ideal comminity .However, it is tough to imgine how a perfect society look like in each people 's opinion,and what the most vital factor in building it

In my point of view, it can be said that there are many conceptions about the wonderful society. I believe that there are many points but safey safety is the key for future society .It 's the symbol for basic freedom.For example,no crime peole can leave their house with unlocked door ( minh k hieu y cho nay) or we can be protected by the law and no accident vo li,no doubt and everybody can trust anyone when they first meet.Living in safety make( makes )people have no stress and no space for worrying .

From the evidence I noticed above , in order to create a perfect society ,each country should vote for good and dedicated leaders nd polician to account. cau nay ve nghia k dc.I think it is the most important issue that people should do in the process of buiding a good communicaty firstly.Secondly why don't we make our society full of love and excitement.? Let's talk with a new neighbour,make with many friend and treat other better( .Morever the  good environmental condition will give us a good life .Joining a hand to clean the streetor collect the garbage or take part in riding bike campagne,we can contribute to protect the earth by a small part like that.

For these reason ( reasons),I belive ( that) we can live in a perfect society in the coming years

Ban nen sap xep y' lai....nhieu cau ban viet con giong Tieng viet, ban doc nhieu sach vao de co dc nhung cau giong van phong TA

 

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Answer 2

Since history (chỗ này nên viết kỹ hơn), human have had a desire of living in a ideal comminity  (community).However, it is tough to imgine (imagine) how a perfect society look like in each people's  (person - each dùng cho số ít) opinion, and what the most vital factor in building it (câu này thiếu động từ)

In (From) my point of view, it can be said that there are many conceptions about the wonderful society. I believe that there are many points (từ này chưa được cụ thể lắm, nên thay bằng từ khác) but safey (safety) is the key for future society.It 's (trừ sở hữu cách ra thì không nên viết tắt) the symbol for (of) basic freedom.For example, no crime peole ( cách dùng từ này sai, nên thay bằng sinful person, hoặc criminal) can leave their house with unlocked door or we can be protected by the law and no accident ,no doubt and everybody can trust anyone when they first meet (bạn nên viết lại câu này theo một cách rõ ràng hơn, mình chưa thật hiểu ý của bạn ở câu này) .Living in safety (lặp từ) make people have no strees (stress) and no (không nên lạm dụng từ "no" vì từ này nghiêng về văn nói hơn) space for worrying .

From the evidence (từ này dùng cho ví dụ thì ổn chứ dùng để nói về các ý bạn nêu là sai) I noticed above , in order to create a perfect society, each country should vote for good and dedicated leaders nd (and, lặp từ) polician to account .I think it is the most important issue that people should do in the process of buiding (building) a good communicaty (ý bạn là..?) firsly (firstly, từ này nên đặt ở đầu câu).Secondly why don't (viết tắt) we make our society full of love and excitement. Let's (viết tắt) talk with a new neighbour, make with many friend (make more friends) and treat other better.Morever,  good environmental condition will give us a good life .Joining a hand to clean the streetor (streets) collect the garbage or take part in riding bike campagne,we can contribute to protect the earth by a small part like that.

For these reason,I belive we can live in a perfect society in the coming years

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