Bai IELTS Task 2 sang 28/3 - IDP Ha Noi

Question

It is sometimes argued that reading and writing skills of a new generation are negatively affected because the use of technology in transferring information is soaring. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this view for the following reasons.

The popularity of high-tech products in communication is beneficial for children to improve their skills to some extent. Firstly, students could use the Internet every single day for their own reading purposes. For example, some Vietnamese learners searching information on common websites like Bbc.com are more likely to catch up with the lastest news about economy, politics, and sports. As a result, the speed of their reading skills are more likely tend to be quicker than those who do not take advanteges of the Internet. Secondly, youngsters can text messages through computers. An essay  might be sent easily through email by students to their teachers in order to check vocabulary or grammar mistakes, so these learners may advance significantly in a short time.

Besides, young people’s abilities are enhanced by the increasing use of mobile phones in communicating with other people. To begin with, teenagers are able to use native words correctly thanks to social network. If a person often use foreign languages to keep in touch with their relatives who have lived overseas for a long time, they will probably apply slangs and idioms to a letter. Furthermore, school-age children could learn more pratical words. They usually read all the instructions before making  a free video call or signing up a game account on mobile phones, which allows them to understand clearly all terms.

In conclusion, I would argue that the influences of technological devices used to transfer signals on youngsters’ reading and writing skills can be totally positive.

Answer 1

Bài viết của bạn khá rõ ý và dễ theo dõi, tuy nhiên gặp một vấn đề là mỗi câu diễn đạt chưa chuẩn, có thể là chưa đúng ngữ pháp điển hình 

It is sometimes argued that reading and writing skills of a new generation are negatively affected because the use of technology in transferring information is soaring.

-> It is sometimes argued that the abusing of computers and mobile phones in communication have adversely impact on children's reading and writing abilities.

Nếu như bạn không đòng tình với quan điểm trên thì nên vạch rõ 2 ý chính cho 2 khổ như sau:

- Body 1: Computers có lợi cho kỹ năng đọc và viết của trẻ

- Body 2: Mobile phones cũng có lợi cho kỹ năng đọc và viết của trẻ

Trong khi đó, Body 1 của bạn lại có dẫn thêm internet mang đến lợi ích cho kỹ năng đọc của trẻ -> ý đó sẽ làm bài viết bị lạc