should students be forced to wear uniform at schools or not . Discuss both view and give your opinions
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          Today, there is a fact that students are forced to wear uniforms when they go to school.Some people state that students have rights to decide what they wear at school but others think wearing uniform is a better choice.In my view, i agree with the view that it should be obligation for all of them to dress uniform for following reasons

          Firstly, it is obviously that uniform can put an end to discrimination. It means that people's appearances looks the same so people can not have a ability to realize other's background. Therefore, people who come from poor family will feel more confident when they communicate to each other. This work also teach our children how to respect and understand to share with their friends so it is a great lesson to promote the emotional development of this young citizens

          Secondly, wearing uniform can teach children about discipline. There is a fact that young children often like to do everything in their own and don't really care about rules in public. This behavior can lead to dangerous situation which can harm not only themselves but also other people. For example, this students, who want to have a free life, will don't want to follow common laws, such as traffic laws when they grow up. This action can lead to many unpredictable dangerous cases for others and themselves because of this free lifestyle. Trafffic accidents can be occurred and this can ruined many people’s lives. This first lesson have a great impact on young children’s behavior, which will help them avoid unfortunate accidents in their future life.

         It is not to say that wearing other fashionable clothes don’t have any benifit. Clothes can also help children show their personality and these also are initial artistic orientations. However, as discussed during this essay, clothes have a big influence on building children’s characters so we should not break this school’s rule to satisfy other minorities. Therefore, wearing uniform at school is essential

         In conclusion, all people can see undeniable and crucial benifits of wearing uniform at school although the opposite idea also have some advantages.By maintaining this rules, we can promote their emotion and sense of responsibilty, which will enable them to become great citizen in the future.

 

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Ý kiến cá nhân thôi nhé :D :

- Advantages: đúng outline một bài "discuss both view", từ ngữ cũng được và ý cũng ok

- Disadvantages: hơi nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp không đáng có (mình sợ là sẽ bị trừ điểm nhiều vì lỗi basic).

Ví dụ như mạo từ "the" cần được thêm vào ở một số nơi như " have the rights to..." hay là "for following reasons"

- Ngoài ra là lỗi ngữ pháp như appearances vốn đã là plural thì động từ theo sau "look" không thể là "looks" được.

- Cuối cùng, be able to do st là khả năng (tự bản thân) cho nên bạn viết " people can not have a ability to realize other's background" <=> mấy người này không có khả năng để nhìn ra chứ không phải là không thể nhìn ra đâu bạn ạ.

* NOTE:đừng dùng viết tắt như don't, can not thì nên nhập lại là cannot

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