Write a formal letter to the manager of Sportech applying for one of the jobs in the advertisement below. Remember to say: - which job you are applying for - what your work experience is (if you have any) - why you would be a good person for the job - when you can start work

Question

Rough draft Refresh Cafe                                   10 Bau Tram 34 Nui Thanh                                 Khue Trung Hai Chau                                        Cam Le Da Nang                                        Da Nang                                October 30, 2014   Dear Sir or Madam, I wrote this application to apply for a position selling part time in the store. I went to store with my friends so much time, I like store’s atmosphere. And I want to try myself, earn money for next semester.   I think I would be very suitable for serving staff positions because I used to work as a waiter in a coffee shop for 1 year. And I used to work as a bartender in a coffee store for 6 months. Besides serving and cleanup, I also used to try to learn more about professional service business, care and counseling customers.   I consider myself an enthusiastic and responsible employee. I really enjoy working as a waiter, I was honest and friendly with customers. I can also update the new style over the internet and my friends. I can receive oder from internet as I can use computer and social network website very well. I can PR your store on many website.   I would be glad if I can discuss directly with you about the job. If my application be accept, I can begin to work at 18/1, when my holiday starts. I can work all day, from 7a.m to 11p.m if you ask.   I am enclosing my CV. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully,    HOAI THANH  Hoai Thanh.

 

Answer 1

Theo mình  thì nên sửa như thế này (ý kiến riêng thôi nhé :D )

 Rough draft

Refresh Cafe                                   10 Bau Tram

34 Nui Thanh                                 Khue Trung

Hai Chau                                        Cam Le

Da Nang                                        Da Nang

                               October 30, 2014

 

Dear Sir or Madam,

I wrote this application to apply for a position selling part time in the store. I went to the store with my friends so much time many times, I like the store’s atmosphere. And I want to try myself (thử thách bản thân? đoạn này nên làm rõ nghĩa một chút, bạn có thể thay bằng từ challenge nếu mang nghĩa thách thức, thử thách bản thân), earn money for next semester.

 

I think I would be very suitable for serving staff positions because I used to work as a waiter in a coffee shop for 1 year. And I used to work as a bartender in a coffee store for 6 months. Besides serving and cleanup, I also used to try (có thể thay bằng"made an effort" để không bị trùng cấu trúc used to và từ try - theo ý mình hiểu câu là như vậy, bạn có thể nhờ người khác xem lại hoặc tuỳ vào ngữ cảnh và chọn từ khác) to learn more about professional service business, care and counseling customers.

 

I consider myself as an enthusiastic and responsible employee. I really enjoy working as a waiter, I was (am) honest and friendly with customers. I can also update the new style over the internet and my friends. I can receive order from internet as I can use computer and social network website very well. I can PR your store on many website.

 

I would be glad if I can discuss directly with you about the job. If my application be (is) accepted, I can begin to work at 18/1, when my holiday starts. I can work all day, from 7a.m to 11p.m if you ask (mình không nghĩ là cần cụm này lắm :) câu này dừng ở 11 p.m mình nghĩ là ổn rồi).

 

I am enclosing my CV. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

   HOAI THANH

 Hoai Thanh.