The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.

Question

The bar chart compares the percentage of sports played in New Zealand, by gender, in 2002. 

 

Overall, it is noticeable that 4 sports that had the highest percentage of people who played were other, swimming, soccer and netball while the opposite was true for tennis, basketball, martial arts, athletics and cricket. In addition, boys were interested in soccer the most while girls were interested in netball the most. 

 

According to the graph, the percentage of girls who played swimming and netball were over 23% while that of others stood at 10%. The proportion of females playing soccer and tennis accounted for about 5% whereas that of martial art, cricket was just under 5%. Moreover, the percentage of girls playing basketball and athletics was just under 10%.

 

In contrast, the percentage of boys who played soccer was 25% while that of cricket and swimming accounted for just over 10%. Meanwhile, the proportion of boys playing other was just over 15% whereas that of basketball and tennis stood at under 10%. At the same time, the levels of males playing athletics and netball were just under 5% but that of martial arts stood at 10%.

 

Answer 1

In overall, you should point out what is the biggest different between boys and girls. For example, The biggest difference was the number of boys and girls playing netball.

you should replace the word "percentage"  with "figure" or "proportion"

Moreover, the diversity in the structure is necessary.