IELTS task 2: what is the pros and cons of publice transport?

Question

In today is society, it is a common sight to see more and more people using public transport. For many, this is a way to protect environment and relax during the way to an office. But there is a concern about crimes when public transport gets overcrowded. In this essay, I will discuss about both sides, following by what I think is right.
Let is begin by looking at the upsides of using public transport. An increment of the number of passengers choosing buses, trolley cars and bullet trains means there will be a reduction of emissions and gases. Therefore, the air will be fresher and the global’s environment is protected. 
Another advantage is you have more time to relax. Instead of driving yourself to a company, a driver will do that for you. While sitting on a chair, you can entertain by listen to music, read a book or even sleep in case of you have busy works the previous day.
Turning to the other side of the argument, crimes are a major problem. Many people think it is difficult to avoid pickpockets and robbers when board buses or trams. In the rush hour, a large number of passengers try to get in public transport as fast as possible is a big chance for those criminals. Although you know those are around, there is no way to keep your belongings safety while everybody is hurrying and trying to push, pull, break the queue. As a result, neither you board the bus nor keep the belongings.
To sum up, using public transport is either good or bad choice depends on you. Using vehicles that environmentally friendly is a benefit, in contrast, the drawback is lost money. Personally, I strongly believe using public transport is still the best choice.

Answer 1

In today is society?, it is a common sight to see more and more people using public transport. For many?, this is a way to protect environment and relax during the way to an office. But ( but ko đứng đầu câu -> However,) there is a concern about crimes when public transport gets overcrowded. In this essay, I will discuss about both sides, following by what I think is right.

Let is begin by looking at the upsides of using public transport. An increment -> increase of the number of passengers choosing buses, trolley cars and bullet trains means there will be a reduction of emissions and gases. Therefore, the air will be fresher and the global’s environment is protected. (global is adj -> the world's environment)
Another advantage is you have more time to relax. Instead of driving yourself to a company, a driver will do that for you. While sitting on a chair, you can entertain by listen to music, read a book or even sleep in case of you have -> had (past) busy works the previous day.
Turning to the other side of the argument, crimes are a major problem. Many people think it is difficult to avoid pickpockets and robbers when board buses or trams. In the rush hour, a large number of passengers try to get in public transport as fast as possible is a big chance for those criminals. Although you know those are around, there is no way to keep your belongings safety -> safely while everybody is hurrying and trying to push, pull, break the queue. As a result, neither you board the bus nor keep the belongings.
To sum up, using public transport is either good or bad choice depends on you ( một câu không thể có hai động từ). Using vehicles that environmentally friendly is a benefit, in contrast, the drawback is lost money. Personally, I strongly believe using public transport is still the best choice.

Good luck

Comments

Thank you very much :) in your opinion, what IE score do I get? And how to fix the first sentence in the last paragraph? Thanks again :D

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I'm not a teacher. If you want to test your writing level, you maybe find a trial test on internet. I suggest you should try 'English level test' app, it is free. To some extent, it will give you your band score of ielts.