write about a hero

Question

Iron man and Thor are two famous heroes in the world. They are called heroes because they have special powers. To me, mom is a hero. She is 40 years old. She is thin and short. But she has to shoulder a lot of work and  under a lot of pressure. One day she is very busy. She works from 5 a.m. to 11 p.m. Every day, she goes to the market to sell fruits. In her spare time, she enlists to make clothes. Because of her father's poor health, her mother became the main earner in the family. She is really strong. hence I love mom and she is my hero.

Answer 1

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There are many youngers who really admire heroes in fiction movies and want to be them. Why? Because they not only have special powers, also save the world. But for me, my mom is the greatest hero in the world. She is 40 years old. Although she looks small, she is extremely strong. Because her dad’s health is not good, she becomes the breadwinner. She shoulders plenty of different things so that she’s usually under pressure. Her day starts at 5 am and finishes at 11 pm. Her main work is selling fruits at the market. Instead of relaxing in her spare time, she spends that time making clothes to earn an income. Though life is hard, she always keeps ahead. She dedicates all of her love to her childrens. She usually courages us in studying and gives worthy advice. That’s why she is my hero. I love her so much!

 

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