Nowadays, the phenomenon that children and teenagers are committing more crimes has caused a number of problems, so people should have some measures to solve it.
Ko nên lặp lại đề bài. Bạn có thể viết là: In this day and age, there is a phenomenon that youngsters tend to turn to more illegal activities than in the past. There are many reasons result in this problem. My essay will show some of that as well as a few solutions.
There are many causes which lead to this phenomenon. One of the reasons is children and teenagers don’t have the ability to control their activities. They see some people do it and then do the same things without thinking --> any consideration. The facilities in the world is --> are modern day by day, the demand of people is increasing, but many people don’t have enough money to buy the things they want, so they take part in the crimes to have it, even when they know it is illegal. In addition, some parents don’t know when their children are allowed to leave school early, so they can’t take control their children on that time, and let them do anything they want.
Because of these bad effects, everyone needs --> need to do something to --> in order to reduce it. Children and teenagers should consider carefully about their decisions --> behaviors, and asked some reliable people if necessary --> in necessary cases. If children and teenagers want to buy anything, they should asked --> ask their parents or find a job to earn money. They can use the Internet to learn how to make this product. Of course, these ways is --> are slow, but safe and legal. Additionally, --> In addition / Moreover, teachers need to inform with children and teenagers’ parents to help their parents take control them more easily
In conclusion, I think people should have several activities to reduce these demerits to help the life better.
Bạn nên thay thế từ Children and teenagers bằng các từ khác như youngsters / Students / pupils / school children để tránh việc lặp lại từ trong bài.