Good morning benzena1, thank you for your contribution. I can see that you have got two points in your essay, they are
- rising fuel prices is unreasonable because it will not reduce the amount of pollution. On the contrary, it might have drawbacks as drivnig the commodities price higher.
- rising fuel price is unnecessary because there are other alternatives for energy source.
You have developed these two points further, however, I dont see any topic sentence which shows the reader your main idea. And below, I have some of my comments for your grammars and vocabs in general
First of all,I personally believe that the increase the price of fuel seem to be not connected to the decline pollution will not make the amount of pollution decrease. Because,{no coma} it is obvious that fuel is an essential factor of human civilization, thus everyone has to spend their finance a big amount of budget for it. For instance, we exploit a vast amount of gas for human activities such as transportation, industrial zones, residential areas. Hence, people need to pay for it any cost to support their life and keep their work. On the other hand, the fuel price rise,which is a major reason to put up the price of the majority of commodities, which lead to the decrease of our living conditions.
Another substitute energy sources to be considered is utilizing green resources like wind and solar energy. Since they not only do not release pollutants into our environment but also are unlimited amount of them, these are truly sustainable. The challenge only seem to be that it takes plenty of time and money to develop modern technologies and finds suitable places for using those resources, but surely, it is worth it in long run
In conclusion, for some reasons mentioned above, while higher fuel prices might achieve less a little consumption, it is not a complete solution. Instead, government should look forward to develop breakthrough technologies and encourage to use the eco-friendly resources we have. Certainly, this is the most effective way.