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Currently, people have been following a tendency of starting up their own company, which leads to their refusal to take part in any company or organisation. From my personal view, I assume that this development more or less brings some struggles.

First of all, there are some reasons why the young want to run their own business. Those who desire to work on their own are likely to get success in the long run. Some people habour an ambition in setting up companies on their own in order that they are probable to go further in their career. Or else some get bored with being under pressure when meeting deadlines assigned by their boss. All of these reasons account for the incentive for the young generation to start their business.
Nevertheless,besides its tremendous contribution to the economy, the drawback should undoubtedly be taken into consideration. Due to the popularity of this trend, people are gradually lacking in the cooperation in working environment. Not to mention, it is obvious that those who love setting up will easily be put at risk due to their lack of experience and certain soft skills such as teamwork. Meanwhile, being involved in an organisation means that they can approach to these afforementioned essential skills, which creates a solid foundation to their further career path.
In conclusion, whether setting up a company by yourself or participating in another firm is totally based on your ability and determination. By all means, before making such an important decision , many elements should be carefully considered.
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Currently, people have been following a tendency of starting up their own company, which leads to their refusal to take part in SEVERAL BUSINESSES or ORGANIZATIONS. From my personal view, I assume that this development more or less brings some struggles.

First of all, there are some reasons why the young want to run their own business. Those who desire to work on their own are likely to get success in the long run. Some people habour an ambition in TO SET up companies in order that they are ABLE to go further in their career. Or else some get bored with being under pressure when meeting deadlines assigned by their BOSSES. All of these reasons account for the incentive for the young generation to start their business.

Nevertheless,besides its tremendous contribution to the economy, the DRAWBACKS should undoubtedly be taken into consideration. Due to the popularity of this trend, people are gradually DISAPPEARING IN WORK OFFICE. Not to mention, it is obvious that those who love STARTING up will easily be put at risk due to their lack of experience and certain soft skills such as teamwork. Meanwhile, being involved in an organisation means that they can approach to these afforementioned essential skills, which creates a solid foundation to their further career path.

In conclusion, whether setting up a company by yourself or participating in another firm is totally based on your ability and determination. By all means, before making such an important decision , many elements should be carefully considered.

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Part 1:  Currently, people have been following a tendency of starting up their own company, which leads to their refusal to take part in SEVERAL BUSINESSES or ORGANIZATIONS.
Part 2: Those who desire to work on their own are likely to get success in the long run. Some people habour an ambition in TO SET up companies in order that they are ABLE to go further in their career. Or else some get bored with being under pressure when meeting deadlines assigned by their BOSSES.
Part 3 : Nevertheless,besides its tremendous contribution to the economy, the DRAWBACKS should undoubtedly be taken into consideration. Due to the popularity of this trend, people are gradually DISAPPEARING IN WORK OFFICE. Not to mention, it is obvious that those who love STARTING up will easily be put at risk due to their lack of experience and certain soft skills such as teamwork.
*Phần in hoa là mình sửa nha bạn. Mình chỉ có góp ý thế thôi
Theo bạn, bài viết này được bao nhiêu "chấm" ?
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Part 1: Currently, people have been following a tendency of starting up their own company, which leads to their refusal to take part in SEVERAL BUSINESSES or ORGANIZATIONS.
Part 2: Those who desire to work on their own are likely to get success in the long run. Some people habour an ambition in TO SET up companies in order that they are ABLE to go further in their career. Or else some get bored with being under pressure when meeting deadlines assigned by their BOSSES.
Part 3 : Nevertheless,besides its tremendous contribution to the economy, the DRAWBACKS should undoubtedly be taken into consideration. Due to the popularity of this trend, people are gradually DISAPPEARING IN WORK OFFICE. Not to mention, it is obvious that those who love STARTING up will easily be put at risk due to their lack of experience and certain soft skills such as teamwork.
*Phần in hoa là mình sửa nha.
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Currently, people have been following a tendency of starting up their own company, which leads to their refusal to take part in any company or organization. From my personal view, I assume that this development more or less brings some struggles.
 
First of all, there are some reasons why the young want to run their own business. Those who desire to work on their own are likely to get success in the long run. Some people harbor an ambition in setting up companies on their own so that they are probable to go further in their careers. Or else some get bored with being under pressure when meeting deadlines assigned by their boss. All of these reasons account for the incentive for the young generation to start their business.
Nevertheless, besides its tremendous contribution to the economy, the drawback should undoubtedly be taken into consideration. Due to the popularity of this trend, people are gradually lacking in cooperation in the working environment. Not to mention, it is obvious that those who love setting up will easily be put at risk due to their lack of experience and certain soft skills such as teamwork. Meanwhile, being involved in an organization means that they can approach these aforementioned essential skills, which creates a solid foundation for their further career path.
In conclusion, whether setting up a company by yourself or participating in another firm is totally based on your ability and determination. By all means, before making such an important decision, many elements should be carefully considered.
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