Nhờ sửa giúp bài này - Computer Introduction [closed]

Question

Hello everybody. Today I will show you the structure and executable functions of a computer.
First of all, computer is also a type of machines, and made to save the effort of human, the activity of the brain specifically. In 1946, the first electronic computer was presented, and computers nowadays become compact, present, and much more convenient.

In general, a computer includes processor, input devices, output devices, and storage devices. These parts coordinate rhythmically with each other, compliment and help each other to process information, and solve the problem posed.

Specifically, central processor (also called CPU) is responsible for receiving the data transmitted by the input devices, process, and return them to the output devices.  Nowadays, CPU may reach a good level of processing, with a huge amounts of work can be done at the same time.

There are so many types of input devices: mouse, keyboard, touchscreen, touchpad, gamepad, or even network devices. This device is under the control, directly or indirectly, by the people, and it convert these impacts into electrical signals for the CPU.

Output device receives the information provided by the CPU, and represents that information back to the user, or transmits them to any other device. Some kinds of output device are: screen, speaker, printer, or even the network devices.

Answer 1

Should not use "Hello everybody" in an academic writing, 

the effort of human=> the manual labour

 computer is also a type of machines, and made to save the effort of human, the activity of the brain specifically. => being hard to understand, not logic

become compact, present, and much more convenient.=> become much more compact...

 each others

compliment and help" omit and, as you should  use "and" in the last object

 processing, and returning

work which can be done at the same time

This device is: =>(these devices are)  under the control, directly or indirectly, by the people, and it =>(they)convert

any other devices 

kinds of output devices are: screen, speaker, printer, or even (obmit "even") the network devices

Comments

You're welcome.
However, your writing still have minor mistakes, which I did recommend. Therefore, you should consult others about your writing.