Writing task 1, the line graph

Question

 

  The line graph demonstrates the number of grams eaten of fast food by British between 1970 and 1990. Overall, the consumption of Fish&Chips and hamburgers showed a dramatically upward trend, while that of pizza experienced a downward trend.

  In 1975, the amount of grams that British consumed Fish&Chips was around 100 grams, which was higher than hamburger's one. Then, both of them increased continously 15 years later and leaped in 1990. In that time, Fish&Chips and hamburgers gained in popularity in UK, Fish&Chips took a lead at 500 grams and the runner up was hamburger with 300 grams.

 In 1975, Pizza consumption started at the highest point at 300 grams, which was about 200 grams higher than the other fast food in the survey. From then, the former falled to 200 grams after 15 years. In 1985, the figures climbed slightly from 200 grams to aroud 250 grams, became the third rank at the end of the survey.

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Answer 1

The line graph demonstrates the number of grams eaten of fast food by British the British (Great Britain là hòn đảo lớn nhất của nước Anh, bao gồm England, Scotland và Wales The UK bao gồm 4 tiểu vùng là England (nước Anh), Wales (xứ Wale), Scotland và Northern Ireland (Bắc Ai-Len) between 1970 and 1990. Overall, the consumption of Fish&Chips and hamburgers showed a dramatically upward trends, while that of pizza experienced a downward trend at the same time.

  In 1975, the amount number (amount for uncountable and number for countable) of grams that the British (chỉ người phải có the trước tính từ) consumed Fish&Chips was around 100 grams, which was higher than hamburger's one that of hamburger. Then, both of them (Fish and Chip là một thôi) The figures for Fish&Chip and hamburger increased continously in 15 years later and leaped in 1990. In that time, Fish&Chips and hamburgers gained in popularity in UK. Fish&Chips took a lead peak at of 500 grams and the runner up latter was hamburger with 300 grams.

 In 1975, Pizza consumption started at the highest point at 300 grams, which was about 200 grams higher than the other fast food in the survey. From then, the former falled to 200 grams after 15 years. In 1985, the figures climbed slightly from 200 grams to aroud 250 grams, became the third rank at the end of the survey.

 

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B In 1975, Pizza consumption started at the highest point at 300 grams, which was about 200 grams higher than the other fast food in the survey. From then, the former falled to 200 grams after 15 years. In 1985, the figures climbed slightly from 200 grams to aroud 250 grams, became the thirdrank at the end of the survey.