Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Studying is considered the most important mission of young generation and entering university is a cornerstone of each person. Some people think the aim of university is to help graduates get better jobs while others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individual and society. Both have their own explanations but in my opinion I think graduating university can give me more than chances to access better career.

First of all, many people think that university is the big gate to open the new world of convenient, high-salary jobs. It’s true to say that, for the reason that university is the place which teaches you academic knowledge and some special skills for each specific job. In fact, applicant with the bachelor's degree usually get priority in application round of many company’s recruitment.

However, student’s life is not made up of only studying. There are many activities in the university which help students to be more active, to have more friends, to exploring more about themselves, to improve soft skills needed not only for job but for the life in the future. These activities will improve each individual’s value which does not only impressive achievements in the career but, more than that, happier life.

Knowledge can help you get a good job, but whether the job give you better life. University is the turning point between life of a high school student and a complicated real life. It teaches students more than knowledge, it teaches you the way to survive, to integrate with others in complex set of relationship outside and be a better person. 

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Both have their own explanations, but in my opinion, I think graduating university can give me more than chances to access better career.

First of all, many people think that university is the big gate to open the new world of convenient, high-salary paid jobs. It’s true to say that, for the reason that (the phrase: for the reason that is unnecessary here)university is the place which teaches you academic knowledge and some specialized skills for each specific job.

However, student’s life is not made up of only studying. There are many activities in the university which help students to be more active, to have more friends, to exploreing more about themselves, and to improve soft skills needed not only for job but for the life in the future. These activities will improve each individual’s value which does not only impressive achievements in the career but, more than that, happier life.(Câu này mình nghĩ không cần thiết vì nó có vẻ chỉ là quay lại cái phrase skills needed not only for job but for the life in the future ở bên trên, bạn thử cho 1 ví dụ soft skill presenting, team working, planning, brain storming chẳng hạn, sẽ giúp students ntn). 

Knowledge can help you get a good job, but whether the job give you better life it doesnt mean the job can give us a comfortable life. University is the turning point between life of a high school student and a complicated real life. It teaches students more than knowledge, it teaches you the way to survive, to integrate with others in complex set of relationship outside and be a better person. (Đoạn này hơi exagggerate quá, vì thực chất đại học chỉ là thay đổi đôi chút của sv, nó bắt sinh viên phải tư duy và tự giác nhiều hơn nhưng ko dạy sinh viên cách sống trên trường đời. Việc complicated life happens chỉ xảy ra khi sinh viên đã tốt nghiệp cử nhân và sống độc lập).

Thân,

Duong NGUYEN

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