your future job

Question

As i was a child,i always dream of being a businessman and now i am trying to study hard to make my dream come true.Being a good businessman is not very easy,it requires soft skills and good communicaton as well extensive knowledge and a bit talent of negotition.Besides,the business helps me to making much money,it is the source of loan for me to do favorite things of me like travelling and food.Futhermore,business is a wonderful experience for anyone who love to be competive and challenging with others.All in all,i want to say that "there is nothing good easy job until it becomes easy".So,I will try more and more to get success in my favorite job.

Answer 1

Since As i I was a child,i I have always been dreaming of being becoming a successful entrepreneur ( businessman) and now i I am still trying ( or  doing my best )to study hard to make my dream come true. Being a good businessman is not very easy, because it requires many soft skills and good communicaton as well as  extensive (or profound ) knowledge and a bit talent of for negotition.Besides,the business sector helps me (to) makeing much money ( earn much money ), . It is the source of loan for me to do favorite things of me like travelling around the world and enjoying great food. Futhermore, business is a wonderful experience for anyone who love to be competive and challenging with others.All in all,i I want to say that "there is none nothing good easy job until it becomes easy" ( mình không biết bạn lấy quote này ở đâu, nhưng mình đọc mà ko thấy có nghĩa gì cả ).So( therefore, thus ) I will try more and more to get achieve success in my favorite dream job. 

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Answer 2

Since As i I was a child,i I have always been dreaming of being becoming a successful entrepreneur ( businessman) and now i I am still trying ( or  doing my best )to study hard to make my dream come true. Being a good businessman is not very easy,because it requires many soft skills and good communicaton as well as  extensive (or profound ) knowledge and a bit talent of for negotition.Besides,the businesssector helps me (to) makeing much money ( earn much money ), . It is the source of loan for me to do favorite things of me like travelling around the world and enjoying great food. Futhermore, business is a wonderful experience for anyone who love to be competive and challenging with others.All in all,i I want to say that "there isnone nothing good easy job until it becomes easy" (mình đọc mà ko thấy có nghĩa gì cả ).So( therefore, thus ) I will try more and more to get achieve success in my favorite dream job.