Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others disagree. Do you agree or disagree ? [closed]

Question

It’s true that many people consider several sports as dangerous, useless ones and they think such sports should not be allowed to play. Personally, I completely disagree with this idea.

For variety of reasons, it would be wrong to ban some particular sports. Firstly, it would be difficult to determine which sport is dangerous and should be prohibited. For example, there are plenty of serious accidents occur in the most popular, seemingly harmless sports such as football, cheerleading and gymnastics. Secondly, almost every person who plays extreme sports is aware of the risks of doing those sports and yet they are willing to keep on it. Sportsmen have a lot of practice and preparation before trying to do something that is difficult and tricky. This ensures the number of serious, deadly accidents is minimized. Thus, I do not think the idea of banning several sports would receive great support from the society. Finally, if a number of sports were prohibited, it might affect the sport industry. Sportswear, sports equipment manufacturing and selling companies would experience substantial loss in revenue which results in much smaller taxes that the government could collect from the industry.

In my view, I believe that people should be free to play their favorite sports. Extreme sports are typically more adventurous than the others, so the people play such sports are more likely to develop a fair number of crucial skills for survival and even for success in life. Furthermore, many people do dangerous sports not only as a way to improve their physical health but also as exercising and strengthening willpower activities. They may find extreme sports more suitable for that reason than other sports. In extreme sports, the desired goals are particularly challenging and usually require great amount of effort to achieve. Thus, it might give athletes a greater sense of fulfillment as they finally reach their goals. Sports that are considered dangerous could be very useful and interesting to play as sportsmen are careful and well prepared.

In conclusion, I do not think that banning dangerous sports is a feasible idea. People should be free to decide which sports they want to play.

Answer 1

I like your ideas so much, but there are some mistakes that I hope you can corect :

- "It’s true that many people consider several sports as dangerous, useless ones and they think such sports should not be allowed to play" =>> it may better if you use the relative clause : It is true that many people consider several sports as dangerous, useless ones which should not be prohibited 

- "For example, there are plenty of serious accidents occur in the most popular," =>> occuring 

-  "Secondly, almost every person who plays extreme sports is aware of the risks of doing those sports and yet they are willing to keep on it" =>> shouldn't write "and yet", you can use : but / Secondly, despite of the fact that almost every person who plays extreme sports is aware of the risks of doing those sports, they are willing to keep on it.

- "Sportsmen have a lot of practice and preparation before trying to do something that is difficult and tricky. This ensures the number of serious, deadly accidents is minimized." =>> Sportsmen always have hard-working practice and good preparation before making their performance, which contributes to minimize the risks of those sports

- "Extreme sports are typically more adventurous than the others, so the people who play such sports are more likely to develop a fair number of crucial skills for survival and even for success in life." =>>  you should revise the relative clause

- "Furthermore, many people participate dangerous sports not only as a way to improve their physical health but also satisfy their passion."

- "They may find extreme sports more suitable for that reason than other sports" =>> may be irrelevant

-  "In extreme sports, the desired goals are particularly challenging and usually require great amount of effort to achieve"=>> Indeed, extreme sports are particularly dangerous and challenging, which requires their extraodinary passion.

- "Sports that are considered dangerous could be very useful and interesting to play as sportsmen are careful and well prepared." =>> Dangerous and adventurous sports are totally different and unique under sportmen's eyes because those sports can fire their enthusiasm

- your conslusion should be add more about what you mentioned above

Comments

Thank you so much for your time and interest Thủy,

I hope to receive much more ideas and opinion from you.