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[It has been common for quite a long time for children to watch television.]-câu này sẽ ổn hơn nếu chữa lại vậy] There has been a lot of discussion in the same way in the long period of time about watching TV of children. However, there are both advantages and disadvantages of doing it. [In this essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument before giving own opinion.- mình thích lập luận vậy] The first obvious advantage is watching television could [relax a child‘s mind.- mình sẽ upgrade cụm này nha] help children to alleviate stress effectively In many countries, especially in Asia, there are more and more parents often put their son or daughter under the pressure to study hard, beside that their children are rarely allowed to go outside to decrease stress levels. Thus, watching television is a (good) effective way for them to (relax) chill out. For example, when they watch with family, (members of their family) family members can help them to solve some problems in school together, which is a great way will improve children’s mood. Moreover, a good hobby like watching television can help effectively prepare a child for the interesting world of study. Today, we live in the era of globalisation, so we should search and learn about many things from any possible source. Television’s programmes are reliable sources which children can look for. For instance, in Vietnam, children between six and twelve could learn English or useful things from Disney channel, Natural Discovery or 3D Handmade. Therefore, we should encourage them to follow these programmes. However, television still has a lot of programs or movies which are unsuitable for children. For example, if a child watch a violent movie or adult’s film, their personality will be suffer from this. In conclusion, the decision of whether or not children should watch television depends on both pros and cons - it may be beneficial, but they should consider watching television with the above points in mind.