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These days, the use of alternative sources of energy has been receiving a great deal of public attention. => Nowadays, the use of alternative power has been attracting a great deal of public attention.
Although this trend is not without negative, the upsides with justifying these. => cấu trúc although+clause, Clause.
There is some certain negative of using alternative sources of energy. =>There are some certainly negative opinions of alternative sources of energy.
First, since nuclear power is criticized for its potential to pollute the environment and people. =>theo mình thì Nuclear power không phải là Alternative energy.
For example, the disaster in Japan reminds=>remined the public of the danger of nuclear plants, (=> ở đây sẽ không dùng dấu phẩy được vì không phải là mệnh đề quan hệ xác định) which the poisonous and radioactive emissions produce=> produced by the explosion not only killed many people but also left a legacy of cancer deaths for the future.
Second, If the installation of wind farms in densely populated places, it will cause noise pollution. => the installation of wind farms in densely populated places could cause noise pollution
This means that they may affect the landscape and create too much noise from their generators.
there are eco-friendly and do not contribute to air pollution. =>there are eco-friendly energy sources that do not contribute to air pollution
This means that no carbon emissions, which problems of climate change and poor air quality can be tackled by increasing the use of alternative energy. =>These kinds of energy produce no carbon emissions which are the main problems of climate change and poor air quality.
Second, in order to are not becoming exhausted, the use of renewable energy will guarantee a boundless supply of energy for the future generation. => In order to+V, In order that + clause, will=> could