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    Marital relationships play a vital role in modern society. However, according to recent statistics, the number of broken marriages is rising at an alarming rate in many Asian countries. This poses a threat to the standard of living of many people.

    To begin with, the underlying causes of divorce are varied. Firstly, marriage arranged by intermediaries such as parents.. is one of the contributing factors in the growing of divorce rate. In Asia, a wide range of couples decides to enter matrimony due to the arrangement of relatives instead of love. This perspective may be conservative which leads to the misunderstanding and conflicts between married couples. They may find difficulties in having mutual commitment and responsibility which may give rise to  broken families. One solution to eradicate this problem is that people should get married based on love. Because it is the foundation of a happy marriage, people can lessen the arguments and can take pleasure in living with each other. Consequently, the figure for divorce in Asia is in decline.

    Another reason for the increasing quantity of failed marriages in Asian countries is the discrimination between men and women in family. In today's world, women are under enormous pressure on striking a balance between work and family. They are required to do housework as well as provide for the family with extra earnings while men are just in charge of finances. As a result, females are vulnerable to illness and they have a tendency to divorce. To rectify the situation, males should contribute to the household chores. Both males and females need to share responsibility for domestic work and other aspects of their marriage. Collective efforts need to be made by them with the aim of creating positive atmosphere in the family. Therfore, the quality of marital relationship cultivates substantially.

    To sum up, a broken family can exert detrimental effect on individual together with other family members. It is crucially important to decrease the rate in order to have positivity.

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      Marital relationships play a vital role in modern society. However, according to recent statistics, the number of broken marriages is rising at an alarming rate in many Asian countries. This poses a threat to the standard of living of many people.[TĐ1] 
      To begin with, the underlying causes of divorce are varied. Firstly, marriage arranged by intermediaries such as parents.. is one of the contributing factors in the growing of divorce rate[TĐ2] . In Asia, a wide range of many couples, who decides to enter the matrimony due to the arrangement of relatives instead of love, eventually get divorcedThis perspective may be conservative which leads to the Indeed, lack of love is highly likely to result in misunderstanding and conflicts between married couples. They may find difficulties in having  As a consequence, mutual commitment and responsibility is difficult to be sustained. which may give rise to broken families. One solution to eradicate this problem is that people should get married based on for love. Because Since it is the foundation of a happy marriage, people can lessen are less likely to make the arguments and can take pleasure in living with each other. Consequently, the figure for divorces in Asia is in decline.
     Another reason for the increasing quantity of failed failures in marriages in Asian countries is the discrimination between men and women gender inequality in family. In today’s world, women are under enormous pressure on striking a balance between work and family. They are required to do housework as well as provide for the family with extra earnings while men are just in charge of finances. As a result, females are vulnerable to illnesses and they have a tendency to divorce. To rectify the situation, males should contribute to the share household chores. Both males and females need to share responsibility for domestic work and other aspects of their marriage. Collective efforts need to be made by them with the aim of creating positive atmosphere in the family. Therfore
[TĐ3] , the quality of marital relationship cultivates substantially. can be promoted.
      To sum up, a broken family can exert detrimental effect on individual together with other family members
[TĐ4] . It is crucially important to decrease the rate in order to have positivity.


  [TĐ1]Where is your thesis statement? A thesis statement should briefly states your answers to the questions.

 [TĐ2]Arranged marriage, which is absent of love, is one of the primary reasons for increasing divorce rate.

 [TĐ3]Therefore

 [TĐ4]Why do you summarize the effects when the questions ask you about the reasons and solutions. Only summarize the ideas that you’ve mentioned in your essay.

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